Season One - Discussion Feb 13, 2013 17:12:10 GMT -6
Post by Tony O'Black on Feb 13, 2013 17:12:10 GMT -6
Mate I am no expert, I'm just going by what I know, have read & written. The more you write, the better you absolutely will get, I 100% guarantee - long as you remain as good at taking constructive criticism.
As for: " badly needs a proof reader to properly pick this stuff out as at times it was just embarrassing." I don't know, I just think that maybe there was a more tactful approach to getting your message across.
Maybe, and I meant no offence, but a professional reader would probably make my bluntness look like a warm, fluffy greetings card.
The more honest someone is, I believe, the tougher you'll become.
I know I need improvement in my dialogue, for sure. I'm not a subtext sort of person, I usually say what I mean and mean what I say, so I'll try and work on that with my characters in the future. Same goes for building stronger personalities for the characters so they sound differently and are not so wooden.
What you need to remember is that you're not writing Darrin, and that's something it's hard sometimes to disassociate from.
All great drama is never about what people say, it's what they don't. Or it's the choices they make, their actions. And remember, Darrin may say what he means (though I doubt you always do, because nobody ever does constantly), but your drama & characters will pop if you let your reader surmise things, read between the lines, as opposed to your characters voicing everything. That's dramatic death.
I've actually noticed an improvement in my writing too, in comparison to The Boogeyman, so thank you for noticing. I tried to take some of the notes given from you and Vaughn from the Boogeyman and use them. Clearly I have a ways to go.
You're getting there. We all are. I'm just trying to make you notice things that'll help.
Thanks again for reading and reviewing, Tony. I really do appreciate it.
A pleasure, my friend. More shall come soon.