Moonwalkers

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Moonwalker is about 18 yar-old Marco and his twin sister Thalia. They also new they were different until there eyes turn bright blue and bloodshot, their hair becomes reddish and they become pale. Marco finds that they are actually creatures call "Empusai", ancient mythological creatures the legend the vampire was based on. Only their closest friends keep this secret but dangers alurk when a woman only known as the "Mistress" leads creatures called "Preiyurs" against them. Can Marco and Thalia over some the dangers or will it be their end?

Main Cast:
Thomas Dekker as Marco Rosenscoff * The Main protagnist
Emma Stone as Thalia Rosenscoff * Marco's twin sister
Logan Lerman as Thomas Epperson " Marco's best friend
Jessica Lucas as Keisha Parker * Marco's girlfriend
Chelan Simmons as LeShayna Jones * Thalia's girlfriend
Lucas Grabeel as Riley Willis * Marco's other friend
Ashley Crow as Emilia Rosenscoff * Marco and Thalia's grandmother
Gary Sinise as Arrow * The gang's vampire ally

Reccuring Cast:
Humans:
Paget Brewster as Det. Kinley * detective studying the gang
Mason Cook as Billy Rosenscoff * Marco and Thalia's maternal half-brother

Preyurs:
Kelly Hu as Aquella * The Mistress's head general
Texas Battle as Rolith * Aquella's lover and mate
Crystal Lowe as Nadira * Preyur suspicous of Aquella's motives
Micheal Chiklis as Hammer * Male henchman
Phoebe Tonkin as Kaela * female henchman

Vampires:
Thomas Gibson as Phetar
Joe Lando as Effert
Rosario Dawson as Leeta
Tom Welling as Sebastian

Episodes:
1x01 Pilot:
Marco and Thalia find out after a strange accident that they are empusai or "moonwalkers" bred to stop and evil warlord called "The Mistress"
1x02 Sacred
1x03 Knowing
1x04 Traitor
1x05 Scared
1x06 Waiting
1x07 Vampire
1x08 Titan
1x09 TBA
1x10 TBA
1x11 TBA
1x12 TBA
1x13 TBA
1x14 TBA
1x15 TBA
1x16 TBA
1x17 Family
more will be posted soon.

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[Brady Brown]

I don't know what to really think about this. They're not that much to go off of anyways, but I'll try my best to critique this.

The premise, doesn't wow me. Nothing really pops. I would specify how he found out that he and his sister were this creatures, and how they come to trust their friend to keep such a personal and dark secret. Just to spice up the premise.

The characters, I know nothing about. You need to give some description on who they are, how they came to be what they are today, they're relationships with the supporting characters, etc. Descriptions is number one when it comes to pitching, for me anyways.

Episode descriptions would also be nice, but you're probably working on them right now, so I'll stay quiet about that.

So, if you can spice it up, and make it more interesting, I think you could grab people's interest. Good luck with this!

[Aimee Nicole]

I agree with Brady on this. We need a little more information on the premise of this series. Where do you want this season to go? Where do you want the series as a whole to go? What brought about the change to these characters? How did they find out? What's the story behind these creatures? What are they, who are they, what can they do, etc. I'd like to know more about them.

I'd also like to know more about your characters. Who are they? What do they want? What are they like? Things like that. Give me an impression to go off of with your main characters, and even your supporting ones. And also, I'd love to see some episode descriptions. Maybe not for all of the episodes, but for a couple that'd be great.

Also, and this is just a nit-pick of mine, make sure to always spell-check. Spelling and grammar is a huge factor into whether something flies with me or not. For the most part, I think you have an interesting idea here but it needs to be fleshed out and we need to know more before we can properly critique your pitch. Regardless, good luck with this!