Mystery Inc. (Scooby Doo Based VS)

[Brady Brown]

PREMISE:

Coolsville, Ohio. One of the oldest towns in the state, which also has the most secrets. Secrets which everyone agrees should keep quiet. Well, the one's who know of them. But a flood came, wiping out the entire town of Coolsville, and the secrets that lie with it. The survivors where finally relieved. The secrets would never come out. They were gone. Or so they thought.

The city was rebuilt. And, years later, everything seems to be going fine. Until a party, which anyone who's anyone is attending, results in a life-changing night. Fred Jones (Chuck Hittinger), captain of the football team, Daphne Blake (Dianna Agron), the hottest girl in school with enough sass to go around, Velma Dinkly (Mary Elizabeth Winstead), captain of the debate and chess team, and Shaggy Rogers (Emile Hirsch), the school's hippie, all end up at the party, some reluctant to go in the first place. Regardless, they go, and they meet. But the circumstances are far from a ordinary. After all ending up in the woods, someone begins chasing them. Who, they don't know. But they're after them, and the only thing they could think to do was to run, where they end up in an abandoned house. A house full of secrets. A house full of ghosts. And also, a house with a talking dog.

CHARACTERS:

Fred Jones (Portrayed by Chuck Hittinger): The captain of the high-school football team, and all-around jock. Arrogant, no. Determined, yes. He's brave, and the number one student in his wood shop class. He's every girl's crush at school including Daphne's, but he doesn't feel the same way. That's not his type of girl. And being a captain, he automatically assumes himself as leader, in everything he ever does.

Daphne Blake (Portrayed by Dianna Agron): The fashion-loving, Queen Bee of Coolsville High. She believes she is the best, and will always be the best. She has her minions who will do anything for her, which makes her ego grow. Her parties are city-known, and anyone who is anyone goes to them, invited or not. And being fashion-oriented, her accessories can come in handy quite a bit.

Velma Dinkley (Portrayed by Mary Elizabeth Winstead): A nerd. She is very competitive when it comes to testing her intelligence, which most of the time turns people away. She's nothing short of a genius, and her knowledge can, and will, get herself out of various, dangerous situations.

Shaggy Rogers (Portrayed by Emile Hirsch): The hippie at Coolsville High. But he's nothing short of a scaredy-cat. He also considers himself a "jokster" but everyone around him would likely disagree. He has a nearly insatiable appetite, which annoys the one's around him.

Scooby-Doo (Voiced by Frank Welker): Shaggy Rogers in dog form. That sums it up. Despite being a dog, he has the courage of a cat. But his excitement for things can light up a room. When he is found, a box labeled "Snacks" lies beside him, something being the only thing that calms his nerves.

EPISODES:

1.01 Ghosts - In 1988, the city of Coolsville was destroyed by a flash flood, destroying most of the town. But they surviving citizens rebuilt. They started over, burying the secrets that lie in the past. Present day: Daphne Blake (Agron) hosts one of her famous parties, inviting her crush, Fred Jones (Hittinger), who doesn't feel the same way, Velma Dinkley (Winstead), who strictly comes to the party to decieve Daphne's mother, and Shaggy Rogers (Hirsch), who just comes to meet his new friend. But when they all end up in the woods, a mysterious knife-wielder begins chasing them, and they stumble upon an abandoned house. Full...of ghosts.

NOTES:

Okay, THIS IS NOT DEVELOPED. There, a disclaimer. XD Anyways, I've put Double Identity, and, possibly Twelve, on hold for the moment. I've lost my initial spark for them, and when I put things aside, I immediately get another idea. And this happened! I hope to add some character bios, because I actually want this to work, because I think it could be a real fun idea. It would basically be Scooby Doo for adults. Or teenagers. Or both, it doesn't matter. I hope you guys are...somewhat intrigued, and any comments are greatly appreciated!

[Deleted]

I love this idea and enjoy what you have so far. I do not know if you remember by Coolsville webisode series pitch, but it was also Scooby-Doo themed. If this is something that you are considering pursuing, I would love to help!

[Brady Brown]

Thanks for the advice, Adam!! Oh yeah, I totally forgot you had that pitch! It sounded really interesting, and I liked what you had going on! And, I really am considering pursuing this, because I sat down to write the pilot, you know, thinking I'd get like a couple pages and give up, but no, I'm at ten pages, and I'm loving every minute of it. And I might take you up on your help offer, but I'd like to see how everything goes down first, and see I really actually end up doing this, because I already have two other series. So we'll see how it goes. XD

EDIT: Character Bios ADDED!

[Deleted]

Great job on the character bios! Hope all goes well.

[Brady Brown]

Okay, I'm beginning to get super serious about this -- it's just so much fun. So, I gave the pilot description, and will be moving it into the official pitch section. So, this is basically the full pitch. Any feedback is awesomely appreciated, and thanks for reading the pitch! ;D

And I'd love to show you guys the teaser, or even a trailer, just to show you what the whole things about, if enough people are interested. I don't want to get too wrapped up in it. XD

[David]

I'd like to see both! Big Scoob fan, have been ever since I was little

[Deleted]

I would definitely read a teaser; I feel like I'm an obvious Scooby-Doo fan. As I said before, if you need/want help, let me know!

[Dan Wallace]

This sounds really cool, has some interesting bios and an awesome pilot description. Big Scooby fan, looking forward to this one for sure.

[Brady Brown]

Thanks for the support, guys! All of your comments are awesome, and I'm glad you guys like the pitch. The pilot is coming along rather smoothly. It's so much fun to write. Trying to throw in some iconic "Scooby moments" so hopefully it won't disappoint. XD

[longhorn]

will there be a pilot?

[Brady Brown]

I'm currently writing it, so yes, if all goes as planned, there will be a pilot. XD

[Brady Brown]

So, I was finally able to write a little teaser trailer, and, if you guys don't mind, I'd love to know what you think of it! Thanks!!

LINK: bcb3988-screenplays.weebly.com/uploads/1/0/5/7/10574926/mystery_inc._-_teaser_trailer.pdf

[Jay Paterson]

I loved the teaser trailer Brady, it seems like your version will be more mature compared to the original series, which is cool. I was rather sad not to see Scooby in the teaser, but oh well it was still awesome!

[Brady Brown]

Thanks for the read, Jay! Glad you enjoyed it! And yeah, there was no Scooby in this. Trying to keep him a secret! XD

[David]

Great trailer, Brady! Love Scooby-Doo. Great job. I like your modern take on it

[Brady Brown]

Thanks, David! Really glad you enjoyed it!

[Amin]

Hey Brady! I'm a bit troubled over this pitch. My main concern, I think, is how you'll manage to make a mature show out of Scooby Doo. Having read the teaser, those concerns are only amplified, I'm afraid. The characters from the cartoon Scooby Doo, who seem more or less the same here, don't exactly lend themselves very well to knife murderers and slasher stuff like that. I don't know, it seems so bizarre when they're being chased by the man with the knife... I get an out of place feeling. And this keeping in mind that there's a talking dog coming up...

On a lesser note, Daphne comes off like quite a bitch, especially with Shaggy. "Not that you have any". Really? Just on a personal, unprofessional note, please don't make her your typical high school bitch. And I'm not sure how I feel about her not being a part of the gang. Slightly bitch-y, "can't help it" offensive Daphne with gang is cool... bitchy, offensive Daphne with equally bitchy minions is just "why don't you crawl into a corner and choke on your tongue"-worthy.

But as I said, I'm troubled over how to take this pitch. It's got potential and I'm a huge fan of the old Scooby Doo cartoon but I'm not quite sure if it'll work as a mature, serious series sadly.

[Brady Brown]

Thanks for the comments, Amin!

And I know I already told you on MSN, but I just wanted to let everyone know that I will not be pursuing this at the moment. I realized I spread myself entirely too thin with so many projects at one time. I might pick it back up once I have The Super Teens and Audition out of the way, but for the time being, those are my main concerns. Thanks to everyone who was interested! ;D