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Post by Florian Ques on Jun 26, 2015 15:09:44 GMT -6
Hey guys, I'm currently working on my first pilot (ever) and I have a scene in my mind where one of my characters is having several successive phone calls but I would want to cut in between each phone conversation to end up with a fast-paced scene. I don't know if I'm making myself clear here, so here's an example. Let's say my character is receiving multiple phone calls telling her she didn't get a job after some job interviews. I would like it to read as if all the calls arrived successively, such as : CHARACTER (over phone) : No it's okay I get it, thanks for calling! (cut to character in another position, for example sitting on a sofa) CHARACTER (over phone) : No spot for a new intern? That's unfortunate for me. (cut to character in again another position, sitting on a kitchen counter) CHARACTER (over phone) : Well thanks for calling anyway. This was a pretty basic example, but I hope you got what I'm talking about. Either way, I was wondering how this kind of scene would be written, script style ? I'm kinda lost here.  |
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Post by Darrin McCann on Jun 26, 2015 17:03:01 GMT -6
Hey Florian! Here's a helpful link. It shows examples of how you could go about the scene. I think it's more personal preference than anything else. Hope this helps. |
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Post by Darrin McCann on Jun 26, 2015 17:04:50 GMT -6
I personally would lean more towards Intercutting - Location 1 / Location 2. That way it's a continuous flow.
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Post by Jack Malone on Jun 26, 2015 20:46:17 GMT -6
Hey guys, I'm currently working on my first pilot (ever) and I have a scene in my mind where one of my characters is having several successive phone calls but I would want to cut in between each phone conversation to end up with a fast-paced scene. I don't know if I'm making myself clear here, so here's an example. Let's say my character is receiving multiple phone calls telling her she didn't get a job after some job interviews. I would like it to read as if all the calls arrived successively, such as : CHARACTER (over phone) : No it's okay I get it, thanks for calling! (cut to character in another position, for example sitting on a sofa) CHARACTER (over phone) : No spot for a new intern? That's unfortunate for me. (cut to character in again another position, sitting on a kitchen counter) CHARACTER (over phone) : Well thanks for calling anyway. This was a pretty basic example, but I hope you got what I'm talking about. Either way, I was wondering how this kind of scene would be written, script style ? I'm kinda lost here. I think this will definitely help explain (with examples) what you're trying to do: click here. I really hope this helps! EDIT: I just saw Darrin's link. Oops. That's also extremely helpful, explaining the exact same process. |
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Post by Florian Ques on Jun 27, 2015 2:23:00 GMT -6
Thanks a lot, guys! I'll try to find the way that best suits me but intercutting with the different locations seems good. Thanks again!  |
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Post by Jack Malone on Jun 27, 2015 2:41:40 GMT -6
Thanks a lot, guys! I'll try to find the way that best suits me but intercutting with the different locations seems good. Thanks again! What I usually do is introduce both locations first, and the one where stuff happens after the phone conversation is the one introduced last. For example, if someone were to be attacked during a conversation, that would be the one that is introduced second, and has the "INTERCUT BETWEEN" in it. But apparently there are times where INTERCUT is used without even using a scene heading, so whatever suits you and your scenes and placement and stuff, then go for it! |
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Post by Florian Ques on Jun 27, 2015 3:06:42 GMT -6
The small difference between the examples on what you sent me and what I'm planning to do is that there's only one location. We never know who's on the other end of the line but we understand it through the replies of the main character on screen. But I'll manage, as long as it seems understandable, it'll be fine!
It's probably not the place to ask for this, but whenever I'm done with the first draft of my pilot, is there any place I can post it to get some feedback? Or some place to ask for a beta reader?
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