Post by Jack Malone on Dec 17, 2009 2:26:53 GMT -6
SPOILER SPACE FOR DISCUSSION OF FABULOUS CORDY - - - - - - - - - - Another great episode, Nicole! I must say, I think the VPN took a great risk picking this show up back then, and its actually paid off. This is a terrific series that I really want to see stick around. This was a rather short episode; that had a massive impact on the characters, and the audience (well for me, anyways). It was a rather emotional episode, which was compelling to read. It ended on a powerful note. Cordelia crying, no, on Cordelia passing that one tear, possibly about to burst out with tears, was a great way to end this episode, and possibly show her moving on from her old life. But, that was the ending, lets discuss the whole episode in aspect. Cordelia and Sabrina are obviously starting a beautiful friendship, they're chemestry is amazing. The scenes with those two are a treasure! I rather enjoyed their fight scene at the cemetery. Great puns, and dialogue used to keep us entertained, and to develop the story/characters. Bringing Skip back was a great suspenseful moment, and his second demise paid off well for the actual season; revealing that he was brought back by some dark, dark evil. Which I'm hoping is the season's big bad. So introducing Skip, and revealing a dark threat, was amazingly handled well. The challenges were well thought of, and Angelus was actually quite horny, wasn't he? I loved how Cordelia led us through the second challenge with her witty dialogue and sarcastic comments. And, the ending, wow. I've already said it. It was terrific. Oh my god, this tops the first episode, which got full marks!! So, although this was a very short script, it did pay off well for the characters and progress of the season. I think once the new characters come into it, the scripts will be that of much more bulk. Before I give off the rating, I just want to tell you that I think you have an amazing way of telling a story. You've incorporated action, drama, comedy, all into one episode that keeps me entertained throughout. Unlike some of the shows on the forum, where I have a break, do something else, and come back, because of the several boring scenes that flow throughout the scripts, I don't have this problem with Fabulous Cordy. Plus, I can't wait to see the next one; which I hope you'll have next week. XD
Episode Rating: 10/10
Again, it was a short script, and usually I'd avise you to add a hell of a lot more in, to bulk it up, but the episode had everything you could want. Anymore it may have been overkill. So don't worry about that. Its about quality, not quantity. You should be proud of this series, Nicole. You've hit high marks two weeks in a row, and I can tell its only going to get even better!!
Post by xsylviamoonx on Dec 20, 2009 14:32:40 GMT -6
Thank you! And yeah it can be pretty hard to make a long script with just two characters, but it'll get easier for me. I have a lot of plans for season 1 and a LOT of romantic relationships to be pursued. I enjoy writing these scripts, deadlines can be difficult though.
Post by Jack Malone on Dec 20, 2009 16:57:29 GMT -6
I'm really excited for this show. I love your two main characters, and their chemistry together. I think with a show like this has that sort of blend between comedy, drama and supernatural/action that makes it really stand out. I hope you try harder to meet the deadlines, because I'm a huge fan of this ... and really want to see how the rest of the season turns out; and a possible second season.
Post by Jack Malone on Dec 23, 2009 22:38:48 GMT -6
SPOILER SPACE FOR DISCUSSION OF "Deal with a Demon" - - - - - - - - - - - Best show on the Virtual Productions Network. Sorry, thought I should start the review with that. You began this series with two cast members/characters, which proved to work fantastically. Slowly building up the Sabrina/Cordelia relationship, they've finally become somewhat of a good friend to one another. Now that Sabrina has learnt pretty much everything about Cordelia in that very sad speech (that was hard to read because it was all of Cordy's life into one conversatoin; made it so emotionally gripping), I think its only going to get better and better and better now. Another great thing about this episode, it stuck with its comedic side, whilst twisting in some very dark plots. Sabrina's father having made a deal with Larl to give him allowance of his firstborn, was a very hard thing for Sabrina to take in. And her "not so colourful" tones began to show. Digging deep into her past, these characters are very much alike which make them so interesting to watch. And, you've brought in the big bad, Kaero; who I must say, seems like a great challenge for these girls, and a great mystery. I must say, you're script writing got very good towards the end, and I hope to see the scripts more like that in the remainder of the season.
Onto the Los Angeles side of things, I was wondering if you had bigger plans for the characters. I personally want you to write them OFF the show. Whether they die, or Cordelia finally moves on from then (which is what I'm hoping is the purpose of their story this season), I want them gone. Luckily, you managed to cut to scenes of them that didn't seem too squishish like the premiere. Fred returning (if she's really back) was a great storyline to explore, and her wanting to co-exist with Illyria, even more intriguing. Fred is a bright girl, so maybe she'll figure it out.
PLUS: Cordy's dreaming about Angel again, hehehe. Awesome cliffhanger to leave us on. But like I said, please don't bring them back if you plan to do a second season (which I am really dying for). Keep up great ratings, and episodes like this, and you'll find yourself going a long way with Cordy's story, and I can't wait to read the last two episodes airing this month!! XD
Post by Chris Davis on Jan 9, 2010 17:54:14 GMT -6
SPOILER SPACE FOR FABULOUS CORDY - 1x02 - Silenced - - - - - - - - - - Nicole, Nicole, Nicole. I don't know how you do it, but you've done it once again. You've proven that picking up Fabulous Cordy was one of the best choices VPN's ever made because this show is absolutely amazing. Ep. 2, I think surpassed the pilot, which was amazing as well. I LOVE the constant comedy you put in your scripts as well as the drama and action. Seeing Skip again was great and the way you put him into the episode was also great. Your portrayal of Cordelia Chase has always been spot on and your original character, Sabrina is very likable. So, I can't wait to read episode three. Good luck with the rest of the series.
Perfect episode. Filled with comedy, drama, action and suspense. Everything was amazing.
EPISODE RATING: 10/10 ( A+)
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Fabulous Cordy is a multi-genred show, most famous for its wacky humor, its characterisation, and the darkening plots that balance out with all its other genres, keeping it a consistant, enjoyable show that anyone can read! It follows the character of Cordelia Chase and her new friend Sabrina, as they start they're own agency, away from their past. The two's connection grows deeper over time, and with the new characters coming in the second half of the season, its only going to get better. This is a cleverly written show, that I can recommend to anyone, jossverse fan or not.
Post by Jack Malone on Mar 13, 2010 17:20:24 GMT -6
I just wanted to post my thoughts on this show again, as I really want it to come back, no matter what:
This show really takes all the genres out there and ploughs it into one big adventure that follows the life of Cordelia Chase. What makes it great is its humor, that is just one huge part that makes a show about Cordy one of the best. So I am glad, Nicole, that you did this, and thought about that when writing it. I really love the supporting cast, and how each episode builds up each character more and more -- which is especially wonderful for a first season. I think that overall, this show could do wonders with a second season; and from what I've heard about the unfortunate event with the computer, as its happened to me before, I'm pretty sure if you wanted to keep writing this, you could finish this season off with whatever number of episodes (even six) and start season 2 with the full amount. Its been a blast reading this, and I really think that this show needs a full healthy life here on the VPN.