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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 4, 2012 9:18:50 GMT -6
Chill has been added to the Recurring Roles, due to her episode count being moved to 3!
Hope you like her!
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 6, 2012 19:30:26 GMT -6
I know this kinda sucks, I'm no pro at video editing. xD
But I got super bored so I made....this! LOL.
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Post by stevieg on Mar 7, 2012 3:06:12 GMT -6
Actually, it's not too bad  The clips cut together are done well. The only thing I think about it, is I'd suggest you put the names all at the bottom of the screen, not some at the top of the clips so all appear along bottom line of clips announcing star names - even if you have some in bottom left or bottom right corners, as long as across bottom of video screen. Also, the created text at end I'd put in centre of the screen and maybe hold on it for several seconds more until the sky covers 3/4 of the picture and then have it show up. That's my thoughts on it, but otherwise I think done a great job with the video. |
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 7, 2012 6:49:34 GMT -6
Actually, it's not too bad The clips cut together are done well. The only thing I think about it, is I'd suggest you put the names all at the bottom of the screen, not some at the top of the clips so all appear along bottom line of clips announcing star names - even if you have some in bottom left or bottom right corners, as long as across bottom of video screen. Also, the created text at end I'd put in centre of the screen and maybe hold on it for several seconds more until the sky covers 3/4 of the picture and then have it show up. That's my thoughts on it, but otherwise I think done a great job with the video. Thanks, Steve! I will make the changes as soon as I can, but I'm up to my ears in school work! I'm glad you liked it! I'm not expert with Sony Vegas, but I do what I can. xD ;D |
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 8, 2012 21:53:16 GMT -6
TEASER TRAILER has been posted!
The link can be found under the "Super Start" description.
Hope you guys like it!
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Post by stevieg on Mar 9, 2012 4:19:25 GMT -6
OKay, just read the teaser. These are my thoughts and hope they are of some help. Just a few things I picked up on reading it First, it's an interesting opening to the show, and good in some ways as need something to draw the reader in and some of this does that - but one concern I had is their is too much happening at the start? In your scene headings, you want a gap as always a gap between words and the "-" symbol ie: EXT. UPSVILLE, WASHINGTON - SKYLINE - NIGHT I'm not sure about the '1 hour later' also, someone else may be able to comment on this one, but my thoughts are could be done as: EXT. UPSVILLE, WASHINGTON ALLEY - NIGHT (LATER) One little thing noticed in 1st page of the scene of kill. You state that the figure takes something out of "her" pocket? Now, I don't know if you want people to know this is a woman or just anyone so could change to "their" pocket so leaves a mystery if man or woman. Also could then use: "The figure points it at...." For me, I would then cut to end of teaser at start of page 4 - at end of fade to black and voice over. It leaves that air of mystery of what is happening with the screen going bright white. And then open act one with the Janice's room scene? The last only issue I would have is, their is a lot of CUT TO and FADE TO BLACK's in it. Try and cut down those as much as possible if you can to the minimum. |
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Post by Amin on Mar 9, 2012 4:32:07 GMT -6
OKay, just read the teaser. These are my thoughts and hope they are of some help. Just a few things I picked up on reading it First, it's an interesting opening to the show, and good in some ways as need something to draw the reader in and some of this does that - but one concern I had is their is too much happening at the start? In your scene headings, you want a gap as always a gap between words and the "-" symbol ie: EXT. UPSVILLE, WASHINGTON - SKYLINE - NIGHT I'm not sure about the '1 hour later' also, someone else may be able to comment on this one, but my thoughts are could be done as:
EXT. UPSVILLE, WASHINGTON ALLEY - NIGHT (LATER)
One little thing noticed in 1st page of the scene of kill. You state that the figure takes something out of "her" pocket? Now, I don't know if you want people to know this is a woman or just anyone so could change to "their" pocket so leaves a mystery if man or woman. Also could then use: "The figure points it at...." For me, I would then cut to end of teaser at start of page 4 - at end of fade to black and voice over. It leaves that air of mystery of what is happening with the screen going bright white. And then open act one with the Janice's room scene? The last only issue I would have is, their is a lot of CUT TO and FADE TO BLACK's in it. Try and cut down those as much as possible if you can to the minimum. About the "1 hour later" thing, I agree with it. When you're watching a show on TV you can't tell if it's been an hour or 53 minutes or whatever. In the modified headline, I don't think there's even a need to have "Night" in it, just "Later". |
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Post by Aimee Nicole on Mar 9, 2012 4:34:30 GMT -6
Uhhh, guys XD That wasn't the teaser to his script. That was a trailer to the two episodes.
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Post by stevieg on Mar 9, 2012 6:36:04 GMT -6
Uhhh, guys XD That wasn't the teaser to his script. That was a trailer to the two episodes. Oops. My bad.  Your right, I didn't even notice said Teaser Trailer. Ignore most of what I said about cutting teaser points then ;D |
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 9, 2012 15:07:04 GMT -6
Oops. My bad. Your right, I didn't even notice said Teaser Trailer. Ignore most of what I said about cutting teaser points then ;D It's okay, Steve! LOL. I'm sorry if I confused you. It was not my intention. ;D About the "1 hour later" thing, I agree with it. When you're watching a show on TV you can't tell if it's been an hour or 53 minutes or whatever. In the modified headline, I don't think there's even a need to have "Night" in it, just "Later". In the actual episode, I think it may make more sense to the reader, or at least I hope it does. LOL. ;D |
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 11, 2012 15:10:50 GMT -6
The TEASER for PART 1 is available under the pilot episode description, and the TEASER TRAILER for BOTH PARTS in under there as well. They should both be labeled so there should be no confusion. Any feedback is very much appreciated!
Thanks!
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 11, 2012 15:50:06 GMT -6
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Post by Squirrel Stone on Mar 12, 2012 17:51:14 GMT -6
Seeing "Super Drunk" just made me burst out laughing. Good luck with the pitch.
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 12, 2012 17:53:23 GMT -6
Haha! Thanks, Squirrel Stone! I think, if I get picked up, that episode would be so much fun to write! LOL.
Thanks!
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Post by Brady Brown on Mar 17, 2012 17:41:29 GMT -6
If anyone would like to read the full pilot, I've got it! I'll PM you the link if you want me to.
Thanks, everyone!
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Post by Deleted on Mar 17, 2012 17:48:42 GMT -6
I would not mind reading it. I really enjoy this pitch! |
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Post by Brady Brown on Apr 1, 2012 8:52:38 GMT -6
This is a Promotional Poster made by the AMAZING Darrin!  |
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Post by xsylviamoonx on Apr 1, 2012 9:22:04 GMT -6
Oh my god, LOVE the poster! And I really hope this series is picked up! I think I'll be a Sara fan =P
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The clips cut together are done well. 
Your right, I didn't even notice said Teaser Trailer. Ignore most of what I said about cutting teaser points then ;D
