Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 26, 2012 15:44:28 GMT -6
Before I put my true hysterical reaction down that I wrote before this I would like to preface it with things that make sense. Fairy Tales are a big thing with me. Not just Disney but original Grimm which makes this show such a hit for me. I love that Disney owns ABC so they are allowed to make allusions to their movies that the current viewers of Once Upon a Time saw as kids, with a new mature twist. It is certainly in my top favorites right now and I can't wait until season 2 premieres in 4 days. Now....for my melt down I just finished marathoning the whole first Season....I don't even know what to do with myself anymore! I got so invested and fell in love with this show!! Also it has managed to do something not all shows can do and the is surprise me. It had twists that I wasn't expecting and they fleshed out fairy tale characters into real people and made all these strangely excellent connections in each story and Snow and Charming and Belle and Rumple and Regina and Emma and Hatter and Huntsman and and OMG I just...I just can't.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 25, 2012 13:27:46 GMT -6
Yeah, at that point I think it would just be a bit unfair to everyone else. BUT you can have fun making one for another show.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 25, 2012 11:45:09 GMT -6
Covers that are non-official may be okay. My Bad Wolf one was just to test to see if I could do it and I made it before this competition. Since it isnt the final one I chose to use it.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 24, 2012 18:23:36 GMT -6
I just saw some pics and now I'm terrified to write one with weeping angels...but if I must then I shall XD.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 24, 2012 1:26:27 GMT -6
Okay so I watched the first 7 episodes of Once Upon A Time tonight....I'm so hooked!! I saw the pilot when it first aired but i didn;t see anymore. Since it was put on netflix I thought I would check it out and now I cant look away. I've already been on this crazy roller coaster of emotion. The end of eppy seven made me tear up.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 18:50:24 GMT -6
I'm pretty sure it was the poor CGI and lack luster story that made it suck more than Ryan Reynolds. I thought he was okay, not the best actor in the world but yeah.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Angel
Sept 23, 2012 12:28:16 GMT -6
Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 12:28:16 GMT -6
I like to think he only killed Wesley BECAUSE it wasn't continuing and Fred wasnt coming back.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Angel
Sept 23, 2012 12:17:00 GMT -6
Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 12:17:00 GMT -6
Joss Whedon actually said that if the show continued then Fred and Illyria would have been separated.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Angel
Sept 23, 2012 12:08:20 GMT -6
Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 12:08:20 GMT -6
FREEEEEEEEED!!! WESLEY!!!!!! * sob sob sob*
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 11:40:21 GMT -6
Oh my gosh she is!?!? I love it! XDD I obsess on casting man so I better be epic at it.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 11:36:17 GMT -6
Hee hee! It's okay Chris, you get points for originality.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 23, 2012 11:32:49 GMT -6
Sienna Miller
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 22, 2012 23:07:20 GMT -6
She gets even better as time goes on too!
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 22, 2012 22:50:36 GMT -6
WATCH IT JACK!! WATCH IT!!! IT IS SOOOOO GOOD!!! Speaking of Merlin. My friend is in a script writing course here at my university and she is having me help her plan an episode/ spec script for Merlin. I feel so honored by this because she is going to school to be a producer and she says I'm good at this stuff.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 22, 2012 22:42:38 GMT -6
Okay, I just now noticed the preview for Merlin Season 5 .... OH MY GOSH THAT LOOKS SO AMAZING!!!
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 22, 2012 17:48:47 GMT -6
Alright, I have read your pilot David. Before I make any statements about things that need to be fixed let me say that think this story idea has potential. I read the clue books all the time when I was younger and I love the movie. With that said I think you could create something worth reading if you accept my advice with an open mind.
Your script is very bare. Scripts aren't supposed to have pages and pages of description, but this style needs to have some prosey bits to tell us what characters look like and what they are doing. In this script there is a lack of that and it is needed in order for the reader to know what is going on. I suggest that you read scripts from everyone on the network and see what they do. The shows that are airing have had success and they are good ones to emulate.
Secondly, I know this is a cliche mystery type story but the characters are very flat. All of them could use some work to make them seem realistic, get to know your characters and make sure when they speak it really conveys them and their personality. That way the dialogue won't sound/seem stilted.
The biggest thing I can suggest is reading and reading example of scripts on the network. When I first joined it took forever for me to hash out what scripts should be like and it wasn't until a year after I joined that I got a show picked up. Don't rush to get something done when it needs to be perfected. However, don't lose heart! Keep trying to get your script up to par with what you see airing on the VPN.
Good Luck David!
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Twelve
Sept 19, 2012 9:04:25 GMT -6
Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 19, 2012 9:04:25 GMT -6
@ David: Except Clue was a comedy and this is not.
I really love the idea Brady! I think this is very mature, and kinda dark compared to the normal pitches you have up. I say you should work on this, but focus on the Super Teens and Audition the most. Plus I love Agatha and I'm sure this will be good.
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Ms. Kerry
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Fight the good fight, Tony, I hate nap time too.
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Post by Ms. Kerry on Sept 17, 2012 11:26:05 GMT -6
So far the Daleks and the Weeping Angels are tied for the vote in who will be a villain! Come on and choose your favorite and have it appear in season one of Bad Wolf.
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