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Post by Jamison on Oct 15, 2015 15:53:19 GMT -6
REVIEW: 1.07 "That Kid From 3rd Rock"This episode was sort of a calm, relaxed installment compared to the previous one. I liked how we got different senses of where everyone is all because of Emily getting fired. It didn't just affect her, it affected everyone around her. And out of that came some very interesting dynamics, most notably Troy and Freya who I did not see having such an addictive reading quality. They bounced off one another so well, and the fact that they bonded over Project Runway is so clever and simple, and I'm already picturing them having Project Runway and Apocalypse Bunker nights (also, thank you for that tie-in, along with the Jace Riordan trial haha). But yeah, I really enjoyed this newfound relationship, and I hope that it continues to grow. Thanks for the read, Brady!! Yeah, this episode was more relaxed than I even intended. I'm sure things will start to liven up more very soon. Troy and Freya's dynamic was a complete accident. I didn't plan it in any way, it just sort of happened and I'm really glad it did, because it was one of my favorite moments to write so far. Thanks for letting me use those references to Audition! Emily has an interesting journey in these last handful of episodes. We'll get to see her reach an all time low that I think it will make her even stronger and more interesting. One night, I was thinking to myself; "How do Joshua and Andrew even pay for the apartment they're living in." haha! So, that's definitely gonna come back into play at some point. I'm already making plans for S2. Joshua doesn't really watch much film or tv, which is ironic given the career he's going into. Should be a fun to see if this will play out in their favor or just completely blow up in their faces... again. No, your review is WONDERFUL! My response is shite! haha! Thanks for everything Brady!
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Post by Jamison on Oct 8, 2015 14:59:50 GMT -6
Airdate: October 8th, 2015 Guest Star(s): Nick Jonas, Freida Pinto, Taraji P. Henson, Regina Hall, Joseph Gordon-Levitt The VPN's Official Description: After their first meeting with an industry producer falls through, Andrew (Manish Dayal) and Joshua (Matt Cohen) decide to drown their sorrows in alcohol, but a new opportunity presents itself when they run into a famous Hollywood actor (Joseph Gordon-Levitt guest stars). Meanwhile, struggling with the fact that she's been fired, Emily (Sharon Leal) is forced to consider what she really wants out of life. Freida Pinto and Nick Jonas also star. Link: Screenwriter's Paradise - 1x07 Written by: Chris Davis
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Post by Jamison on Sept 29, 2015 14:56:41 GMT -6
I really loved the original pitch and idea and I gotta say, my feelings are no different here. It seems like you have an even better grasp on the universe than before, with a group of characters who seem to compliment one another pretty well. From the pitch, it does sound like a few different shows and ideas mixed into one. So I think the main focus here should probably be characters. Making sure they're strong and well written. Speaking of characters, I really like Jackson and Lydia so far. Woah, just noticed the Teen Wolf connection. Was probably a coincidence. I only read the first few episode summaries, as I didn't want to spoil myself, but I'm liking the direction. Seems kind of episodic, which I think works for a show like this, especially in the first season. So yeah, that's all I can say right now. It can go either way, depending on the pilot, which I'm hoping to see soon! Good luck with this, Karl!
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Post by Jamison on Sept 28, 2015 22:19:40 GMT -6
I think it's great that you got passionate about another series, and can actually do something about it since you're well ahead on your main project. Kudos to you! What's your secret!? Moving onto the actual pitch. Gotta say, I love the idea of a survival series. I'm a fan of the zombie apocalypse genre, so I'm instantly attracted to the idea, but I'm gonna have to agree with most of what Jack and Brady have already pointed out. Just going off the pitch, the series seems like it's just another one of the countless zombie series/movies that already exist. There doesn't seem to be an original hook to set this apart from the rest. There might be something in the pilot that contradicts that, but I feel like if that's so, it should definitely be made apparent in the pitch. Again, I'll have to echo what Jack and Brady have already said about your characters. I'd love to get out of this ' large camp/group' dynamic and just focus on a handful of close knit characters, all from different walks of life, working together to survive. There's always room for others to be added to that group in the future, but starting out, it'd be a little something different than what we've grown used to thanks for The Walking Dead and the like. So yeah, can't really say much else that the others haven't. Would just really like to see a fresher take on this genre. Something that really draws me in. But good luck with this, Brian.
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Post by Jamison on Sept 28, 2015 22:09:47 GMT -6
So....I love Hellbound. Any chance we will get the season premiere soon? I've actually been thinking a lot about Hellbound lately. Hopefully, once I've finished all the few remaining episodes of Screenwriters Paradise Sequence One, and finish the season one finale of Tomb Raider, I can start working on this. I'd definitely like to get back into this universe some day soon.
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Post by Jamison on Sept 27, 2015 22:16:46 GMT -6
EXCLUSIVE: Screenwriter's Paradise/Audition Crossover Event Part Two!!!
With the arc two premiere of SCREENWRITER'S PARADISE just weeks away, VSGuide has just gotten word that the cast of hit VPN webisode dramedy series, AUDITION will appear in arc two for the second crossover event between the two shows! Scheduled for the two part crossover are Audition stars PATRICK DEMPSEY as Michael Berreta, AMY ADAMS as Paula Smith, JOSH HUTCHERSON as Alex Berreta and ALYSON STONER as Alisha Hall. Along with the entire main and recurring cast of Screenwriter's Paradise.
Like the previous crossover event, both episodes will be co-written by executive producers BRADY BROWN and CHRIS DAVIS. Producers could not release episode summaries at this time, but we can expet more details on the crossover event when Screenwriter's Paradise airs on Thursday October 8th, 2015!
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Post by Jamison on Sept 13, 2015 18:55:37 GMT -6
REVIEW: 1.06 “First Pitch”This arc one finale definitely delivered on the comedy beats, while also maintaining a shocking ending. I really liked the opening scenes (not for obvious reasons) for how well you handled writing it. It could have easily been extremely vulgar, but you managed to maintain that explicit factor while still handling it in a professional light. Joshua and Troy have a relationship built on pure attraction and sexual activity, and I’m interested in seeing it explored, if it happens to come to that. Troy made a comment on not hooking up with guys, so he must genuinely see something in Joshua that causes him to stay and to pursue whatever is coming out of it. Then, we got a really nice moment with Andrew popping in, and a really funny Troy freak out that led to an even funnier gaze that Andrew had for Troy’s naughty bits. I also really liked how Troy wasn’t just going to be a messenger between the two parties, and actually told them to go and talk to Emily themselves. I love that, despite being her assistant and being by her side most of the time, Troy can still stand on his own and won’t be treated like an assistant when he’s not supposed to be one. I just thought that was a really nice aspect to his character. Hopefully I keep the sexual stuff tasteful and not too vulgar. Let me know if that ever changes so I can dial it down. Haha! I wanted Joshua and Troy's relationship to start off pretty sexual before developing into something more. At this point, there's no telling which of the two will begin to want more from their relationship, if not both. But it's something I'm thinking about and definitely plan on exploring later. And yeah, Troy hates being the the middle man, and won't do it unless he feels he has to. It's his pet peeve, which is why is kind ticked him off a little bit. Those two are so cute haha! Freya's sketches and interest in fashion will definitely come into play a lot. Her dream has been put on hold and I think her journey will be about discovering herself, what she really wants, and trying to get it against all the obstacles put before her. She's a very shy, mousey woman, so Emily may be able to help her make her mark in a city like L.A. which is one of the main reasons I just had to put those two together. His storyline this sequence takes a bit of a turn in arc two. We'll get to see him become more involved with the others, though he'll probably remain one of the most independent characters. Sorry for that out of place scene. It was supposed to just be some making out, leading up to sex, but it gets interrupted before anything happened, but I got a little carried away haha! Will try to be wary of that in the future. I really don't want any unnecessary stuff in there, especially considering the limited amount of time I have to tell the story per episode. And we'll definitely be seeing more of Amber, Eli and yes, Stanley. Gotta bring the douchebag back. Originally, Emily was gonna get fired in her introductory episode But I put it off till episode six. We'll be seeing the aftermath of this when the show returns. But this is just a bump in the road for Emily. She's the type of person that doesn't stay down for long. I'm sure she'll figure something out. I'm much more worried for Andrew and Joshua. Thanks for reading! So glad you enjoyed. Also, I apologize for this EXTREMELY late reply! Don't beat me up, please!
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Post by Jamison on Sept 10, 2015 17:46:09 GMT -6
"The Weed Master" ReviewFinally sat down to continue reading Screenwriters Paradise. This episode primarily picked up where we left off in the series premiere with the main characters eyeing off someone who could definitely help out their situation. Nervously talking themselves in and out of approaching Shawn Leonidas, Joshua and Andrew eventually interact with the out-of-work actor, and pull out all the stops to try and form a bond that seems to not work in their favour. It isn't until Andrew picks up a fallen blunt and shows off his "talents" with it that Shawn grows impressed and eager to hang with the two. Elsewhere, we are introduced to Emily, who probably had the most interesting and entertaining dialogue in the episode, as well as her assistant, Troy, who are struggling to find a new pilot worth investing in. Overall, both storylines within the episode were entertaining, and connected with this party/event that I'm assuming we'll see in the following episode where hopefully these two worlds will collide. Thanks for giving it a read and review, Jack! Always love hearing your thoughts. Also, I'm so sorry for this incredibly late response. Procrastination has been pretty bad for me these last couple of weeks. Haven't gotten anything done. I'm glad you're finding Emily's interesting so far. She's definitely a character with a big personality and I hope you'll grow to enjoy her even more as the series goes on. You're correct, the worlds do very much collide in episode three. The first two really served as two halves of one whole, and probably would have worked better if they were aired together, but I'll know next time. I really love writing for this set of characters. Probably more than I initially thought I would. Not because I didn't care about them, but I kept thinking I had to make them funny and force them into situations were humor would be brought out more. But luckily, after writing them for a few episodes, writing them and their different types of humor became more natural for me. Hopefully it will continue to improve as I write more. Yeah, I see how that could be a problem. I feel like once all the characters are introduced in episode three, there will naturally be more of an equal balance between stories. I'll be forced to check on characters other than Andrew and Joshua more often, so hopefully that's an issue that just resolves itself. I'll definitely be keeping that in mind though, so thanks for bringing it up. I spend most of my time writing these scripts on dialogue, so I'm so glad to hear that everyone seems to be enjoying it. This is the first VS where I've actually gone through the script more times than I can count to make sure the dialogue was on point (or at least decent) because I'm so worried about how I handle comedy. I need to get over that and just write the thing because it seems to be going fine so far. Guess I'm funnier than I thought. This review is just fine! haha! Hopefully if you decide to read more and get more familiar with the show and the characters, you'll feel better about giving your thoughts, but for now, I just hope you enjoy what you read. Andrew and Joshua's relationship is definitely highlight for me when writing the show, and I'm so glad its being taken so well. If it wasn't I think I'd cry in a corner somewhere. haha! Shawn is mostly in the background for the first arc. But he'll get his time in the spotlight during arc two. He's the character that took the longest for me to really nail down, even in the development, so I understand him being on the fence for people thus far. Thanks soo much for the feedback, Jack! It's always a pleasure to read!
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Post by Jamison on Sept 4, 2015 18:05:19 GMT -6
REVIEW: 4.11 - "Weedy Comfort"
We're back!! After seven weeks, Audition has finally returned and I couldn't be happier with this mid-sequence premiere! We got so much in this episode from the FOUR plots in this episode. David and Mia were definitely the highlights of this episode for me. Their relationship isn't one I expected to love in the beginning, but you've managed to create this really strong, interesting dynamic that sort of just works for whatever reason. Their scenes are always a pleasure to read because it gives them both a chance to be seen in a different light. We're getting to see a softer, more genuine side of Mia. And David has decided to put himself first, which I completely love. I know that came at the end of the episode, but David in that scene really touched me and I just want the best for him. He's one of my favorite characters on the show and his friendship with Mia is definitely helping the both of grow in a lot of ways. That scene in the end gave me all sorts of feels. David being able to reflect on what he's been going through, both physically and emotionally. So many feelings about Alisha's betrayal, getting shot, and feeling like he's some kind of doormat come rushing to the surface and Mia was right there to support him. Such an important and necessary scene. Loved it! Perhaps one of my favorite arcs of the series so far, is Alisha arc this sequence. We're getting to see what it means to question your sexuality and explore the ins and outs of yourself in a very realistic, personal and familiar way. You're taking her journey of self discovery quite slow and treating it with care, which I really appreciate and commend you for. As her friendship with Kelsey grows, she's noticing things about herself and growing more and more curious and I'm really interested to see where this all leads to. Whether or not Alisha and Kelsey form a romantic dynamic as a result of all this, I'm still hoping they remain close because Kelsey seems like a really good friend to have. I enjoyed the little bit of Alex/Rose we got in this episode. Even if it was just a cute text, which led into a scene between Rose and Robbie. Their dynamic this sequence is moving along and I'm still not too sure what to make of it. I definitely like the idea of them going out and pursuing their careers, so hopefully so good can come out of this. Probably one of my favorite things in the episode was the scene between Alex and Michael. I just adore their relationship and the love they have for each other. The way they support each other is amazing and exactly what a father and son relationship should be. It's great that Alex's love for acting and Michael's love for writing is another way they can relate and bond, just through their passions. I don't know. It was just a really heartfelt and well written scene and I loved every moment of it. So, Audition's return definitely did not disappoint! It's so good to be back and I can't wait to see what else you've got in store for us!
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Post by Jamison on Aug 28, 2015 15:45:07 GMT -6
EXCLUSIVE: Joseph Gordon-Levitt Signs On For Recurring Role As Himself!
Coming off the heels of the mid-sequence finale of SCREENWRITERS PARADISE, VSGuide was able to obtain its first bit of news on the upcoming second arc! JOSEPH GORDON-LEVITT (Inception, Looper) has reportedly signed on to play himself in the freshman webisode dramedy! Producers were able to confirm that he would appear in a three-episode arc, with the possibility of an extension!
Along with the news, VSGuide learned the title and episode description for the arc two premiere! WARNING! Episode Description Contains Spoilers for 1.06:
1.07 - "That Kid From 3rd Rock" - After their first meeting with an industry producer falls through, Andrew (Manish Dayal) and Joshua (Matt Cohen) decide to drown their sorrows in alcohol, but a new opportunity presents itself when they run into a Hollywood actor (Joseph Gordon-Levitt guest stars). Meanwhile, struggling with the fact that she's been fired, Emily (Sharon Leal) is forced to consider what she really wants out of life. Freida Pinto and Nick Jonas also star. Romeo Miller does not appear in this episode.
Stay tuned for more exclusive info and updates for the remaining episodes of Sequence One! SCREENWRITERS PARADISE returns Thursday, October 15th 2015!
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Post by Jamison on Aug 28, 2015 15:42:21 GMT -6
1x06: First PitchWell, I've been really bad at reviewing. Basically I have read the past couple of episodes and just have to say this, WOW AMAZING WOW OH MY YES WOW GREAT 5 STARS. Now, lets get into the MID SQUENECE FINALE!!!!! <----- Totally spelled that wrong. But I really enjoyed this episode, for me it kind of sets up the next back half of episodes that will return October 15th. #PlugItIn. Thanks for reading/reviewing Brian! And you are not bad at it. Stop it! The sex definitely gets a little more graphic in this episode. I wanted to see how much smut I could get away with and I think that's about the limit for me. I don't think it'll get any more graphic than this! haha But it was ... interesting to write. I wanted it to be kinda messy and gross because it seemed more realistic to me. But glad you thought it was well written. That's a relief because I actually don't like writing those scenes all that much. Freya and Emily will develop an interesting relationship. I love both of those ladies and having them living together was something I planned on doing from the start. Glad I was able to do it sooner rather than later. Only good things can come from this haha! Shawn's plot this sequence is really dark and it might get even worse than this before it gets better. He has a long journey ahead of him. Sooo glad you've enjoyed the show thus far, and I can't wait to hear what you think when it returns in October!
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Post by Jamison on Aug 28, 2015 15:20:50 GMT -6
REVIEW: 1.05 "Intruder Alert"I loooooved that we shifted focus from Andrew and Joshua this week and mainly followed Emily as her life continued to spiral out of control once she found her douchebag of a boyfriend in bed with another woman. But before that, we see Troy driving her home, and that entire interaction was a really great thing to read because their relationship is different than that of Zawson, we still get a playful sense between them that's pretty much built on respect from the workplace. The entire conversation was funny because it's obvious it's happened before by Troy's reaction to "You're fired." Emily and Troy have been a lot of fun to write for. Their dynamic is really playful and fun, and I really want to expand on that in arc two. While they both kinda of go off on separate arcs. Emily will be involved more in Freya's storyline and Shawn's. While Troy has his relationship with Joshua. I always love to put those two together because they were so connected in the beginning. Glad you enjoyed that little scene and hope you enjoy what's to come from those two Emily was not playing around haha! I loved showing that wrathful side of her personality. I wasn't sure whether I should have had Emily take the car or not, but went ahead and did it because Diego is rich and he really could buy a new one. I definitely want to bring Deshia and Zani back in arc two! Emily has such an out-there personality, so it's only right that her best friends match those traits of her, and possibly even surpass them. There's a "Girls Night Out" type episode with Emily and Freya coming up and I'm sure I can throw in Deshia and Zani. Should be a lot of laughs Zawson's time will come. Maybe. haha! Yeah, they're just kind of there in this episode. I couldn't really find much of anything for them to do besides much needed filler until Emily got there. But I still enjoyed writing this interaction. The tickle fight was sooo random and just thrown in there as another way to show how close these two are. I loved writing it haha This will basically be the two of us when we meet. I love showing the playful aspects of their relationship but I also love when I can bring the comedy down and get to some real, dramatic stuff. Also, usually Joshua is the one to openly express his love for Andrew, but I wanted to turn it around and have Andrew be the one that's like "No. You're my best friend and I want you all to myself." I think it's important that the audience knows that its not a one way street for their relationship. They both love one another equally. Yeah, I wasn't subtle about Freya becoming Emily's new roommate. Like... at all. It was pretty obvious, but I'm glad you still enjoyed it They will have some interesting scenes together in the episodes to come, so I hope you enjoy them. Andrew and Freya have a very tender relationship that I'm loving to explore. It's different from Andrew and Joshua, but at the same time, but also similar in a lot of ways. There's a lot more still to come for those two Thanks for the feedback, Brady! So glad you're enjoying the show!
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Post by Jamison on Aug 27, 2015 17:35:16 GMT -6
Airdate: August 27th, 2015 Guest Star(s): Nick Jonas, Freida Pinto, Bob Odenkirk, Rick Hoffman, Marie Avgeropoulos, Tyler Perry The VPN's Official Description: As Emily (Sharon Leal) and Freya (Freida Pinto) settle into their new apartment, Andrew (Manish Dayal) and Joshua (Matt Cohen) try to convince Emily to make good on her promise to set a meeting with them and her boss, Frank Teller (Bob Odenkirk guest stars). Meanwhile, Shawn (Romeo Miller) visits the set of "The Johnsons" to beg for his job back, but he might end up making matters worse. Link: ninth-spectrum.weebly.com/uploads/6/8/3/8/6838324/screenwriters_paradise_-_1x06_-_first_pitch.pdf Written by: Chris Davis
*This episode marks the mid-sequence finale! Screenwriter's Paradise will return October 15, 2015!*
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Post by Jamison on Aug 21, 2015 13:57:47 GMT -6
EXCLUSIVE: Rick Hoffman, Marie Avgeropolous & Tyler Perry Join Screenwriter's Paradise!!In an all new production update, VSGuide has gotten word of a trio of new actors to make their way onto Screenwriters Paradise as soon as next week! Next Thursday will mark the mid-sequence one finale and is said to focus on the entire cast with a pretty heavy subplot for Shawn's character, who's been mostly in the background for arc one.
RICK HOFFMAN (Suits, Cellular), MARIE AVGEROPOULOS (The 100, Tracers) and TYLER PERRY (Gone Girl, Good Deeds) are set to make their first appearances in next week's episode, 1.06 "First Pitch" and will be involved solely in Shawn's arc. Hoffman is set to portray "Stanley Page," an executive producer on "The Johnsons." Avgeropoulos lends her talents as Stanley daughter, "Amber Page" while Perry is set to portray "The Johnsons" head showrunner "Eli Shaw".
VSGuide was also able to get the official episode description for the mid-sequence finale! Read it below: Excited to see these new character in action on the show? Want to know more about just how they'll get involved? Be sure to tune in this Thursday for the mid-sequence finale and information on when to expect the show to return!
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Post by Jamison on Aug 20, 2015 7:56:17 GMT -6
Airdate: August 20th, 2015 Guest Star(s): Nick Jonas, Freida Pinto, Taraji P. Henson, Regina Hall, Adam Rodriguez
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Post by Jamison on Aug 18, 2015 18:11:01 GMT -6
There is a lot of information in the premise, and its all pretty interesting. I'm absolutely in love with all things science fiction, especially time travel, so automatically this was appealing to me. You've got some intriguing ideas and scope of a series like this could be huge. I can't wait to see how your characters bring the plot to life. I plan on reading the pilot sometime this week, and should give you a review soon after. But color me interested. I think I'll hold off on reading the episode guide until I've finished the pilot, but it's always nice to see a pitcher that's thinking ahead. One thing I noticed was the lack of diversity in the cast. Other than Lance Gross, I didn't spot any other POC in the cast (correct me if I'm wrong), which could be pretty unrealistic, especially for a science fiction series with such a massive scope. That's something I've been really paying attention to lately, and I know others might not think its a big deal but it could definitely help with the realism and making the show more dynamic and inclusive. This is a pretty solid pitch and idea. Thanks for deciding to pitch here and best of luck!
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Post by Jamison on Aug 14, 2015 16:56:38 GMT -6
REVIEW: 1.04 "Aftermath of the Shindig from Hell"I really loved the way this story was structured. It added a pretty cool sense of mystery not knowing what had happened with any of the characters the night before, and it was almost like we were Andrew, so putting the audience in that position was really clever. I also adored how Andrew was the one who doesn't remember anything, whereas Joshua was the the seasoned hangover veteran and was able to recount the night to a tee. I don't know, it was a nice little surprise because from first glance you'd think that it would have been flipped, and I really appreciate that you didn't go that obvious route. This episode was originally formatted so much differently. We were just going to see a double date between Joshua, Troy, Andrew and Freya. With a possible side story for Shawn and Emily. But when I got to writing the episode, it seemed like this route worked better for where I want to take the characters in the next few episodes. So, I'm glad it worked for you! Joshua had to get naked at some point. I started to not have it be full frontal but then I thought, women are always showing their breasts on camera, so why not. And yeah, I really wanted to show just how comfortable Joshua is with Andrew, and just as a person. What you see is what you get with him. And maybe Andrew will come around one day, and start opening up more. I'm not very experienced when in comes to writing sex scenes (I've only written two) which might be the reason I cut it short. But it's bound to happen again at some point, so I'm gonna have to get used to it. HAHA! But I'm glad I was able to write it in a way that wasn't too explicit or smutty. Because that's something I really don't want to do, because it'll just make me uncomfortable and probably the readers as well. Unless somebody asks me for X-Rated versions of the scenes haha! We'll definitely get more insight into Shawn's anger problems in arc two. It might seem like he hasn't had much of a role so far, but he has a big arc coming up that really pushes him over the edge and shows just what kind of person he is. It's probably the arc I'm most excited for in sequence one. So, I'm glad you're interested Freya is just the cutest. She's so down to earth and geeky, and that's something I want to bring out even more. Her relationship with Andrew is something I didn't think too much about. Just let it organically develop as I wrote it. There should be more backstory on what exactly happened to make Freya leave in arc two. So you'll have to wait a little while, but not too long. So much mystery surrounded Freya's character because of this. She is introduced as this high class model who has everything. Then its revealed she's the exact opposite and has been struggling to make a name for herself, but is still trying, so I'm glad we're now getting to see her for who she is. We still have a lot to learn about her as a character and I hope you enjoy her journey this sequence. It's gonna be full of feels, but I think we can get through it together Thanks for the feedback, Brady! As always, I love you so much for it I think this episode was one of my favorites as well. Next week is Emily centric since she wasn't in this episode that much.
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Post by Jamison on Aug 13, 2015 9:48:27 GMT -6
Airdate: August 13th, 2015 Guest Star(s): Nick Jonas, Freida Pinto
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