I started off my work in the VS world working on a big staff show (Slayer Academy) so I've grown rather fond of them and considering I'm taking shows solo over on TEN, I thought that this would be a good opportunity to get a staff going again! I'm looking to hire some extra hands for my newly picked up show, Easy. The pitch can be found here and has a link to the pilot so you can get the feel of the show and see if you're interested.
The positions I'm looking for are:
PRODUCER/STAFF WRITER (2 available positions) I've always been a big believer of writers having a say in production of the show so I'm merging these two roles together. You don't have to do the producing side of things but if you want a say in how the show works then this your shot. You will be writing 1 or 2 episodes per season on a first come, first served basis (as in, whoever applies first will get the episodes they want and so on) and you will be following an outline written by myself.
GRAPHIC DESIGNER (1 available position) It's no secret that I'm pretty damn terrible with graphics and whilst I'm satisfied with the show banner and the cast graphics, I could really use some promotional posters or video promos so if anybody has an eye for that sort of thing and is willing to help out then please apply!
In order to be considered for these roles, you must meet certain requirements:
- You must be an active community member on either theVPN, TEN or MZPtv with at least thirty posts on one site.
- You must send a sample of your previous work ie a script for applying staff writers and graphics you've made for the graphic designer.
- You must know how to format and write a script and be able to take constructive criticism on your first draft. (Trust me, nobody's first draft is perfect!)
- Must be willing to read episode drafts as they are finished and contribute to discussions and feedback.
- Must be active on both theVPN and on the show's backstage board.
Any interested parties should PM me with their samples! Thank you!
Post by Tommy West on Feb 16, 2013 12:50:31 GMT -6
1x11 "Dance, Dance" Review
Oh David, I'm not sure Star Wars references are considered "teen, hip lingo" anymore but points for trying! He's a bit of an idiot and I'm still a bit sad that you didn't go down the route of making him a villain to everyone (Alex and Alisha and Jordan and Angela) because it would be cool to have a third party forming here as right now it's pretty much good vs evil rather than getting twisty.
It's nice to see Jordan and Angela addressing their abusive relationship and it's clearly been going on for a while if Angela has apology texts from six months ago. I don't actually know the song she sung with Alisha but it was a pretty cool moment and reminded me of the many sing-offs between the diva characters on Glee. It's a shame that musical moments can't really be pulled off in VS because of the whole lack of music because it seems like a cool sequence in actuality.
The scene where Alex and David find the 50 Shades book made me laugh, if only because of their reactions. It's terrible erotica, absolutely terrible. BURN IT!
The ending's good and I like the fact Jordan and Angela are getting their bitch on with Alex. I do enjoy a good villain (you might have realized that by now) so it's cool when they're effective and mess the heroes around. I'm not really surprised that Alisha spoke to David first, it must be easier to talk to a stranger than somebody you're scared of leaving, so...
I have a feeling I know how the sequence is gonna end.
Post by Tommy West on Feb 16, 2013 12:19:13 GMT -6
1x10 "I'm Here" Review
This was a nice episode purely because it focused on two characters who haven't really had much to do previously and lets us see into their heads. I'm not totally in love with the plot itself purely because I think it's really selfish of her mom to ask her to come home just because she's lonely when it could ruin Alisha's dreams. She's already had a taste of success in the commercial and she's been a lot more upbeat lately so this plot is sort of dragging her down to the dumps. I don't really have much to say as it was all one scene but it was a good episode and I like how it ties into the next one and there weren't any characters forced into the script for the hell of it.
Post by Tommy West on Feb 16, 2013 10:55:43 GMT -6
1x09 "Mom" Review
"She just shows up, cackling like a maniac a couple of times a day." What a brilliant description of Paula and judging from what we've seen so far, actually quite fitting! She does seem to arrive at their apartment at random times. I like her running joke of the square chin guy. Her comment about David's name and him being a boy and not a weirdly named girl really made me laugh.
Alyssa turning up throws a spanner in the works for Alisha but she seemed suspiciously vague about why Alisha needs to come home. I'm hoping she's actually hiding something and doesn't just want to take Alisha home so the show can have some drama. Sure, Alisha isn't my favourite character but if a character's going to leave then I'd rather it have a purpose rather than for a random reason.
David and Paula's commentary throughout the conversation was funny, especially Paula's comment about thinking she's ugly and David laughing at them all speaking at the same time. They're probably the funniest characters right now but I'm really hoping David ends up as a villain. He could be a very fun antagonist to Alex.
Unfortunately I wasn't a big fan of the dialogue in this one, it felt a bit flat although there were some good lines as the script went on. It's a weird phenomenon but a lot of the episodes have started with poor dialogue but improved with each page, like you're getting more confident with the characters the more you write them, which is good.
Paula in the car was amusing, as well as the girls teasing the guys because they screamed. The little scenes of Paula dropping them off are cute, if a bit unnecessary but they're worth it for the little gems of Paula acting like a nutter.
For once, I thought Angela had one of the best lines, namely - "Cute. Short. One syllable. Kind of like ’crap’, which, I’m guessing, is how your acting is going to be." It's a real zinger and that kind of snappiness is the stuff I wish they were saying all the time. I think this show could really benefit by playing up to the stereotypes of actors being really catty and bitchy. It's a lot of fun when characters get their claws out and I'd love to see that here.
Alisha gets a great line too - "So does a dog until it goes rabid and bites through your finger." It's nice to see the female characters shine because they've been a bit underserviced previously.
I was really worried I wasn't going to like David and his first like made me wince because ow, that's painful imagery! I like the fact he stands up to Jordan though and the fact he's sassy about it. That's the kind of dialogue I like! I couldn't help but laugh at the James Bond line. I'm kind of hoping he turns on Alex and Alisha, that could be a lot of fun.
Nice to see Jordan get a bit violent - I'm wondering when he's going to move from walls to other characters!
"Spook Fest" Review
A nice little episode, a bit silly but good fun. Turning up at a costume party wearing the same thing as somebody else is always awkward so it was fun to see it happen here, making it feel like it was reflecting reality more. The game was fun, if a bit daft, and I cottoned on with what Alex wanted Alisha to do in order to win. I like it when these guys play dirty, it should happen more often because having two angelic leads can get a bit boring and it's always fun to have them be a bit mischievous at times.
I'm always really nervous about comedy which is why I doubt there'll be outright jokes because if there were, they'd probably suck. Instead, I think that most of the humor will come of the characters and their attitudes to the world - like Drew's dislike of socializing at his new school, for instance.
Drew's relationship with each boy with progress in different ways. As of the pilot, he really doesn't want a relationship and that's going to be a barrier he'll have to overcome. Don't expect things to be resolved easily though, this love quadrangle won't be disappearing a couple of episodes in. They're all viable love interests for him!
Post by Tommy West on Feb 15, 2013 20:56:32 GMT -6
I was uncertain about Marlon at first but the more I saw of him (literally!), the more I wanted to use him. It's annoying, there are so many good actors and actresses out there, it's just finding the roles for them! I know I want to use Sharman and Roden at some point and depending on who gets the role, I'm sure that Haynes, O'Pry and/or Teixeira will apepar in some capacity. Damon isn't bad either, I'm sure he'll crop up too. Thank God for guest cast, eh?
Post by Tommy West on Feb 15, 2013 17:19:13 GMT -6
It's early days yet but I wanted to make this thread so people can discuss the series as I work through production. Feel free to speculate - I've made it my mission to push the boundaries with this show so just how scandalous do you think things are going to get?
Post by Tommy West on Feb 15, 2013 17:17:44 GMT -6
At his last school, Drew was the most popular guy around. Openly gay, he and his boyfriend were the school’s power couple. Things went sour after his mom hooked up with her boss' son - when her boss was their next-door neighbor. It was the last straw and finally the family packed up to move houses, moving all the way to Sunset Valley, CA. Newly single and confused about where he stands, Drew finds that life at Sunset Valley High School is going to be different. Somebody at the school has it out for him and all of his secrets are coming out once at a time.
You may have noticed some changes on The Entertainment Network (Yes, we sometimes forget we’re not just called TEN sometimes too) and not just in the cosmetics department. 2012 was an exciting year for TEN – three new shows as well as the return of beloved older shows taking virtual series in directions it’s never been before – and 2013 is only going to be better.
The first and most obvious change has been our forum’s upgrade to Proboards’ new V5 system which allows the forum to look slicker and has added the shoutbox feature which has already been put to good use for discussions about virtual series. Unfortunately at this date we have no way to archive our shoutbox discussions so be sure to check back frequently and join in the discussion! The forum upgrade comes with an updated look for our older schemes, as well as several new ones – now you can change the forum’s appearance to schemes ‘Inside Out’, ‘Marvel Heroes’ and ‘Marvel Villains', all featuring graphic work by Darrin McCann or ‘Caydem’ inspired by our hit show Caydem Falls and featuring graphic work by Dex Macleod. There are more schemes on the way based on our current range of shows so keep an eye out as we make the forum look even better!
Our team of staff members has taken a small shift in recent days and we’re pleased to announce that Kyle West as agreed to join our team as a Network Producer after continued dedication to bettering the site both through his script releases and with ideas for behind the scenes. Dex Macleod will be joining Kyle as a Network Producer whilst Alden Caele has stepped up to the admin team of Network Presidents. He will work with current presidents Tom East and Dan Taylor, as well as the Network Producers, to establish and moderate several new schemes being introduced in the near future.
The first of such schemes is the introduction of our Mentoring Scheme which will allow newer writers to experience working as part of an established show staff whilst also developing their own pitched series with the help of an experienced producer, one of the admin staff. The internship will be on one of four shows – Dead City Blues, Knight’s Haven, Marvel Origins or X-Men: Revolution – and will take place over three months. At the same time, a producer will assist them in developing their pitch into a quality product for eventual release on the network when they deem the series to be ready. This scheme will be put into motion soon but mentees will require a community presence and a good attitude towards both praise and constructive criticism before they are considered.
The following months will see development in many of our currently airing shows, as well as the premiere of a new hour-long series by Malleus Maleficarum and Blood Red Shoes writer, Li Robb, entitled X-Men: Revolution. The series once again takes the X-Men mythos in a different direction and promises the thrills and drama that we’ve all come to know and love in Robb’s scripts. Expected to air its first four episodes starting from April, X-Men: Revolution will be returning later in the year for the remainder of its first season. The series takes place in a different continuity from TEN's Marvelverse, meaning that Robb won't be tied to the events of any other Marvel-related show on TEN.
TEN’s official Marvelverse consisting of X-Men: Rebirth and Marvel Origins will also be an ongoing presence in the forum’s schedule over the next few months. The next volume of Marvel Origins, Origins: X-Men, will began airing daily from February 25th for ten episodes and features episodes written by showrunners Tom East and Alden Caele, as well as scripts written by newcomer Steve Goodman. X-Men: Rebirth will be returning for its fourth volume in late March for an extended twelve episodes, with East and Caele both writing episodes as well as their Slayer Academy alumni Chris Haigh. The characters of Angel and Madrox were previously confirmed to be leaving the series at the end of the third volume but the decision was made to bring them back for one further volume with a plot featuring their search for mutant criminal, Switch (Winner of our Best Guest Star award). Origins and Rebirth are expected to air multiple volumes over the course of the year with East and Caele writing for both shows.
The winner of our Best Virtual Series award, Knight’s Haven, is to return in April with its second season with a special webisode prequel airing shortly beforehand. The show won three awards in our recent awards, including the previously mentioned Best Virtual Series as well as a tied award for Best Episode and Best Lead Male for its popular lead character, Sebastian Knight. What’s in store for Sebastian and his crew now that the first season is over? You’ll have to find out in April! Kyle West's webisode series Stay Away From England focusing on a riot-infested England recently aired its first volume to critical acclaim and will be returning in May for its second.
Looking further into the year, expect to see the return of Darken House with the one-hour special Piece of the Sun in June and a Caydem Falls special just in time for Halloween. Popular action/mystery webisode series, Inside Out won four TEN Awards this year including Best Writer and Best WTF! Moment and will be making another shock move – this time into the one-hour format with four new episodes airing in its annual December slot. Recurring characters Owen Black and Ryan Carlton will join Kirby (Best Lead Female) and Trevor Summers (Best Supporting Male) as Regular Characters for the show’s third season after the shock ending of Sequence Two.
Dead City Blues, now airing in syndication at our affiliate network MZPtv, will also be returning for its second sequence later in the year with the writing team of Caele, Robb, East and Claire Rooney, who wrote for the first sequence and is best known as the showrunner of MZPtv’s retired Buffyverse series Fate. Dates for the show’s return have yet to be revealed but the second sequence will also air on MZPtv in syndication months after the show’s airing on TEN.
That’s all for our longwinded announcement but if you thought it was too long and didn’t read, here’s the gist – new staff, new look, new show content and an easier way for new writers to get involved! Here’s to making 2013 an even better year than the last!
Post by Tommy West on Feb 15, 2013 14:34:04 GMT -6
1x07 - "Jealousy" Review
Nice to see the tension between the friends and their rivals come to a head. Jordan is more menacing here and I was expecting him to punch Alex rather than just shake him about a bit but I'll take whatever conflict I can get! Him shutting down Angela after the 'talent' comment made me laugh even though it shouldn't have. Sure, he's an abusive dick but I can still find him funny, right?
Speaking of funny, Paula gets another brilliant moment when she 'picks up on' (because let's be honest, it was quite obvious anyway!) the tension in the room. Also, her with the car doors locked made me laugh, even if it was a bit silly and didn't totally make sense.
Nice to see another villain and unfortunately he comes off a bit playground-y like Jordan and Angela. As an adult, it would nice to see him be a bit more menacing than the duo as his voice comes off a bit 'young' right here. Still, I'm hoping that the three villains will be enough of a challenge for the heroes throughout the rest of the season.
Nice final lines of dialogue too. You've hit the dialogue mostly spot on in these last two episodes and it's only really the occasional lines from the villains or maybe Alisha that could use tightening a bit. Still, good job!
Post by Tommy West on Feb 15, 2013 12:00:00 GMT -6
1x06 - "Commercial Success" Review
Starting this review off with a mundane grammar comment that in-universe, isn't even a bad thing which was this line: "[...]sent in for a...Alex Berreta[...]". Technically there's nothing really wrong with it because the man didn't know the name he needed to say but my OCD winced at him saying 'a' instead of 'an'. I'm a bit silly with things like this because it doesn't matter all that much at all, but if it happens one too many times, I might end up going all Norman Bates on you!
Luckily it's followed up with a brilliant Paula line, namely the "Yes!! Yes! I mean... yes." She's so odd, I love her. All is forgiven, haha! I love her overexcited reaction to them getting the part in the commercial. She's seriously the best character in this show, she's brilliantly bonkers. I almost died when she was screaming outside the apartment and then the vomit line... Comedy gold.
I picked up another SPAG error when Michael says "But I thought you wanted to be actor" which took me out of the script a bit. Every writer makes SPAG errors and doesn't spot them straight away though (and trust me, I'm particularly bad) so be sure to make sure to reread all your scripts and make sure to iron them out.
I like the plot decision to have Alex against shooting the commercial, it's never a bad thing to make your lead character too pride or even a bit arrogant. It adds layers and stops Alex from becoming a boring Mary Sue-esque character so bravo for that.
I think this might be my favourite episode so far so well done! I want the show to be more about this sort of stuff with them making progress and causing a little conflict in the group. I've been pretty vocal about the fact Alisha hasn't got much development yet so putting her on her own and having her at odds with Alex lets both of them shine equally. I enjoy the rivalry at the acting school but i think this stands out a bit more from the other episodes because the conflict is internal this time rather than external. I'm hoping there will be more episodes like this because it's made me excited to read on!