Post by Jay Paterson on Jul 3, 2012 21:49:56 GMT -6
Rebirth isn't gone. It's just taking a break in order to be reformatted and rewritten. The first draft of the pilot is complete. If you want to read it, I could PM it to you. But it may be a while before anything new comes out of it.
That's good to hear, it would be a shame to give up in such an interesting story. Really? that would be awesome if you could send me the pilot, i would love to give it a read.
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on Jul 3, 2012 21:44:54 GMT -6
I actually really like this idea. When i first started reading this i thought i was going to be a sitcom but clearly i was wrong. I like the fact that its not about young kids achieving their dreams and about been there 'tried' that, or failed. Its not been done that much, well not that i know of so it seems original enough to me. All the characters seem really interesting especially drew considering he never even got the chance to attempt his dream due to the car accident, and became bitter, so i want to see how having all his friends back will affect him.
The only thing i'm not to sure on is the title, but i know its a working title so i hope you come up with something that works better long term.
Looking forward to seeing more from this pitch, i would like to see more episode summaries.
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on Jul 3, 2012 21:06:06 GMT -6
I need this show in my life! I love inception so anything remotely relating to that i know i'm going to love. I love the casting choice's and agree with Chris that its great to see a female extractor, Evangeline Lilly will kick ass in that role.
Reading the episode summaries got me really excited for this show because i started to imagine how it was going to progress and could see it getting bigger and bigger each episode, ending with the epic finale of course of will they make it out or be trapped in limbo forever! I like that there's a different case each episode, show's like this really interest me because i like to see how each episode's story effects the characters lives and how if will influence their journey.
All in all i just gotta say i love this pitch and i am so looking forward to reading the pilot.
P.S. what ever happened to your pitch Rebirth? i was really looking forward to seeing more from that show but it seems to be gone.
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on Jun 25, 2012 5:51:30 GMT -6
I stopped watching afte PR Lightspeed Rescue. MMPR is of course the best but i still liked them after turbo. I thought 'In Space' was awesome and i also really liked 'Lost Galaxy'. Man i miss watching PR. Does anyone know where i could find decent quality eps online? i downloaded MMPR but the quality was terribly un-watchable!
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on May 31, 2012 22:40:50 GMT -6
Thanks M.J. the first point is a really good one actually. I felt myself explaining in past tense and having to go back and change it cause it seemed wrong. Yeah I've looked over it there myself and noticed some spelling mistakes. Some word's i'm not sure about as the US and UK have different spellings, like i just found out you spell color were as we spell it colour. wierd huh? I agree with the sentence structure i was just kinda briefly writing it just now so i will sort all of that out when i go back over it in edit.
Thanks again M.J. your feedback helped alot
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on May 31, 2012 22:26:46 GMT -6
I cant wait. "CONTEST!" hahaha
I noticed your slot was on a Wednesday, and Halloween is on a Wednesday with year. It would be totally cool if you tie Halloween into the episode that comes out on that day (if you've not already thought of that). I think it would be pretty cool as its a werewolf show xD
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on May 31, 2012 22:14:28 GMT -6
Thanks for the feedback Dan. Damn those spelling mistakes xD. Maybe in my own head it seemed more of a 'Little Red' reference. I meant for the whole teaser to symbolize that famous wolf story with her visiting her grandma, and wearing a red coat and lipstick etc. and of course the 'eyes' reference but maybe it didn't come across that way. I'm glad you liked the flirty aspect, its what came natural to the story when writing it. I was just worried in case it took away from the 'scary' side of it.
Thanks again for the feedback, I hope to get more done over summer now that i'm done with college.
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
Post by Jay Paterson on May 31, 2012 21:46:01 GMT -6
OK, so i have just finished my first draft of my teaser and would like you guys to check it out and give me some feed back. Keep in mind that this is the first ever piece of script writing I've done so don't be too harsh xD I'd love some constructive criticism and pointers. It still needs a bit of work as it lacks detail in a lot of it but i wanted to show you guys it to make sure i'm on the right track.
As well as leaving your own feedback i have a few of questions? 1. The teaser is a reference to 'Little Red Riding Hood' do you think this is a good or bad idea? 2. I'm now wondering that there should be more tension and mystery between Shawn and Anna in the car rather than flirty. what do you think? 3. And also do you think the them talking is too long compared to the attack itself?
for anyone that reads and comments thank you !
CREATOR The Wolfpack | Dropouts
SHOWS I'VE WORKED ON Winchester | The Path Not Taken
I'm glad you like them.
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