I enjoyed it. I'm definitely a fan of the movie Clue, but this definitely already feels like it has a different, more serious vibe. Huge fan of murder mysteries, so I hope to see a full pilot in the future.
I wasn't able to watch too many movies this year with work and school, but I was able to catch Chronicle, which I thought was one of the best movies I've seen in quite some time. Hunger Games was a definitely a good. Not as great as the book, but I find Jennifer Lawrence very enchanting and wonderful. I did catch Paranormal Activity 4 and it wasn't great, but I wasn't much of a fan of the others. Still need to see Cabin in the Woods, the Avengers, the Dark Knight Rises.
New around here, but I've been a member of MZP for a long time. This is one of the first pitches I ever pitched almost 5 years ago, although it's gone through many changes. I really wanted to get some fresh eyes on the pitch and pilot and get some much needed feedback. I hope you enjoy.
Sidenote: In the script, the character of Brayden is now going to be called Lincoln in the pitch. Just so it doesn't confuse anyone.
I used to be normal. Before moving back home with my crazy parents. Before my twin brother killed himself. Before I found out just how weird my hometown really is. Normal? I don’t think I even know what that word means anymore. Aurora, California, a town where the strange and peculiar are an everyday occurrence. I’m Avery Strong: Student. Outcast. And now…paranormal investigator.
Max Thieriot as Avery Strong Avery is the show’s hero. Moving back to Aurora after the suicide of his twin brother, Alex, Avery takes over his brother’s extracurricular activity of investigating the things that go bump in the night. Your average teenager, Avery is a smart, stubborn individual whose own reservations about the supernatural may be his only downfall. Determined that Alex’s suicide wasn’t what it seemed, Avery’s one goal is to find out what was behind it. Add to that a strained relationship with his parents and a town who thinks he’s insane, Avery has a lot going against him, but will not let anything stand in his way.
Claire Holt as Emily Davenport Emily isn’t the friendliest individual. As Alex’s girlfriend, and her own past tied to the supernatural, Emily helped Alex with his independently run school magazine entitled, Strange Times. Hardened by Alex’s death, Emily has a hard time letting Avery, or anyone for that matter, in. Genuinely a good person, she just wants to find the truth, and to let people know about it. With dark secrets of her own, she feels that Avery has a right to know the truth and may be the only one who can keep Alex’s dream alive.
Dev Patel as Chandler Yadav The only person to befriend Avery upon his arrival in Aurora. He’s definitely more a sidekick than a leading man, but he’s come to terms with that and buries his anguish with inappropriate humor and jokes. The son of Aurora High’s principal gives him a certain “get out of jail free” card when it comes to getting in trouble. When he’s not mouthing off, he’s usually trying to get the girls to notice him.
Naya Rivera as Tessa Alvarado An outcast in school, Tessa doesn’t take any prisoners. A badass, she is from the part of town where you don’t want to park your car, or walk the streets alone unaccompanied by the Dark Night. She’s definitely a glass half empty kind of girl. Known to run with a certain crowd, she isn’t a girl you want on your bad side. A lot of heart, and a hatred for all things fab, she is often at odds with the rich and shameless, and doesn’t believe for a second they’ve earned what they got. Her own connections to the supernatural put her on Avery’s radar from time to time, and if he plays his cards right, she could be a great ally, or an even greater foe.
Colton Haynes as Kyle Lincoln "Link" Daniels Link is part of Aurora High’s royal court. He is the Darth Vader to Avery’s Luke Skywalker, and doesn’t like that Avery is taking over for Alex one bit. Your typical jock to the untrained eye, he’s moody, angry, and thinks he can get away with anything just because he’s the sheriff’s son. His new goal is to make Avery’s life miserable and he’ll stop at nothing to make it happen.
Ashley Benson as Jude Monroe Jude Monroe. Popular. Queen Bee. All synonyms for the word “bitch”, but Jude has no qualms with the various nicknames she is called around the halls of Aurora High. Daughter of Lance Monroe, the town’s Mayor and leader of the coven of witches that inhabit the bustling hamlet, she often abuses her power for her own personal gain and rarely apologizes for it. When Avery comes to town, she doesn’t take a liking to his kind too much, and makes it a point to keep Avery on his toes.
James Marsden and Keri Russell as Carter & Beth Strong Carter and Beth Strong are Avery’s parents. Carter, a passionate and fun-loving individual, has been a paranormal investigator all his life. Beth, nurturing and headstrong, came into this life when she met Carter and ditched her old life and became a professor of Paranormal Studies at Hastings University much to her family’s dismay. Having a difficult time since Alex’s death, they are happy that Avery has decided to stay, even if they know he isn’t a believer, they hope to one day reunite their family as a whole…or as whole as they possibly can.
1x01: pilotguyrjames.webs.com/1x01%20Script.pdf Avery deals with finding his place in a town where he is immediately deemed an outcast. Picking up on the case that his brother was in the middle of, Avery is faced with questioning everything he has ever known.
1x02: eyes wide open In search for the truth, Avery takes on one of his dad’s cases. New information regarding Alex comes to light and a mysterious laptop may hold the key to what happened to Avery’s brother.
1x03: bad moon rising In an attempt to save Tessa from an attack, Avery is bitten by a werewolf. In transition, Avery must deal with heightened senses, new feelings, and tracking down the rogue werewolf and kill it before his transition is complete.
1x04: the chupacabra way A creature from Emily’s past comes back to haunt her and it’s up to Avery to help her cope. Chandler makes a breakthrough in hacking his way into Alex’s computer files and what is found could be the answers Avery has been waiting for.
1x05: adventures in séancing With the knowledge that Alex was cheating on Emily, Avery wonders if this is what caused Alex’s death. Emily and Avery have their first date. Jude is enlisted to try to communicate with Alex on the other side with disastrous results.
I'm currently working on the 2nd draft of my pilot for a project I've been working on for years. I can't for the life of me think of how to start it in an original way...or at least something that hasn't been done before. Think I might step away for a moment and work on something else.
I feel that procedurals can get boring. I love them and I think it's great that you can turn on the tv and no matter what episode, season, etc, you can enjoy it without needing to know a huge backstory, but backstories and character development between episodes is what I love about writing. I definitely think you can find a good mix, but serialized is the way to go.
Definitely some good advice there. It took me months to stop writing passively. It was what I was used to and comfortable with, but it was amazing that simply changing the tense of a verb can completely alter your scripts flow.