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Read the first episode and I don't have much to add that hasn't already been said. The writing was well done. Each character seems to be uniquely different and you have a character named Lincoln (my recently picked up show, Avery Strange, does as well), so I'll definitely be tuning in for future episodes. I'm excited to see where these characters go and the affects it has on their individual lives as well as how they get along as a group. Job well done.

Episode 1|03 is one act away from being completed and 1|04 is currently being outlined. Why does work always have to get in the way of progress? lol

***update*** episode 1|03 is 3/4 complete. Still would love some feedback on the pilot if and when anyone has time. Felt really productive this week.

Sorry it took so long, but I finally checked out the pilot and I’m hooked.

1x01: Stir of Echoes

Okay…the pace was insane. So much was packed into this episode, but it worked. This is obviously a nod to you knowing the direction you want for the series and have a good grasp on the world that you have built here.

Kudos on starting the action right out of the gate and this episode didn’t let up. I started reading the pilot on my lunch break on my phone figuring that I could at least get it started and then finish it when I got home. That didn’t happen. Read the entire episode on my lunch break (and might have gotten back a few minutes late), but it was worth it.

The world and the elements you set up are all so strong…each character playing an integral piece in the Paradise puzzle. Smartly, you’ve given us enough to become invested and understand who each of these characters are, but you’ve left a lot to be discovered.

I really hope that we explore Diamond’s childhood and continue to learn more about Eve’s past. They were the real shining stars. Reign was an intriguing character and I hope we learn more about his relationship with Seth and how he got to where we are at the beginning of the series. The weakest link at this point is Aemilia, though I have hopes that she’ll grow as a character as she becomes more involved in Diamonds world.

Overall, I really enjoyed Stir of Echoes. This show is exactly my cup of tea and I look forward to reading more.

Hey. Just wanted to stop by and say I plan on taking a look at episode one as soon as I can. Looking forward to it.

Awesome. Awesome. Can't wait to hear your thoughts. Currently in the middle of Act One of Episode two. Hoping to get the revised pilot up by the end of the weekend.

Thanks so much for taking the time to read the pilot. It means a lot.



I'm really glad that Avery and Fish's relationship came off well. Avery and Fish are a blast to write. They have this easy chemistry and their relationship is a big part of the show.



I appreciate this and will be taking a look at each of the moments. My hope was for them to give an inside look of Avery's thought process and help us get a better feeling of how he's feeling and what's going on in his head.



Thanks again, STEVIEG, for taking a read. I appreciate all of your feedback and hopefully, if Avery gets picked up you'll like what I have in store.



Thanks so much. This pitch has been through so many incarnations over the years and characterisations were always the issue. I finally felt while writing this pilot that I got the best mix of characters that compliment each other that I possibly could. Avery and Fish's friendship is such an important element in the show and I wanted to make sure that it was highlighted in the episode, so I'm very happy that you felt that.



Wow. This is a huge compliment. Going into Avery I always knew and know that comparisons will be made, but any ounce of freshness and originality makes me giddy.



I'm so glad that you enjoyed the V.O. I debated back an forth whether to include them, but ultimately they won out. I feel that it adds a needed element to the show.



These are all elements that I am looking at in my editing process, so I appreciate you letting me know. I appreciate the vote for pick up. It's been a long time coming but I need to get Avery's story out there and stop procrastinating.

Thanks to all who have been reading. Would love to get some more feedback. I'm currently editing the pilot as well as beginning outlining on episode two. Hope to have a revised pilot sometime next week.

Hmm...anyone else having trouble with the link? And along the same lines...what sites (preferably free) do you use to host scripts?