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I totally want a Dexter: Origins too!

Okay, people, lets cast:

Ash Ketchum

I want to start off by saying I love this show. I want to continue by saying that the crossover episode was horrible. If it wasn't for Cat's scenes and Calista Flockhart's phenomenal acting chops this episode, in my opinion, would have been a huge flop. I feel almost dirty writing the words because I am such an advocate for this show but this episode turned me completely away. Cringe-worthy dialogue. It was a no-holds-bar of cheesy one-liners and sloppy dialogue all around. I don't know if the acting was a result of the material they had to work with or what but it was ridiculously bad. I'm not exactly sure the point in Barry crossing over besides informing the masses that Supergirl takes place on another Earth. Oh, and now National City Police are equipped to handle Metahumans, which is kind of a big deal but was merely mention in quick passing. All the stuff that should have mattered didn't, and all the stuff that did shouldn't have. It was evidently clear that this episode was a last minute write or the very least a rewrite to include Barry. I'm crushed and a little disappointed.

** REVIEW ** 1.01 - F My Life

I definitely like the idea of the Photoshop images and Craiglist Ad as the reason for Dylan getting the boot from the Dean. Out of all the incarnations of reasons he was kicked out this one seems very believable. You've taken an act of stupidity and turned it into a personal vendetta against Dylan. I can't help but to think that if it were another teacher on Campus that Dylan had done this to, that his punishment wouldn't be as severe as it is with the prank being on the Dean. So, I absolutely love it.

One of the reason I fell in love with the original Pilot was because of the characters, and although it's gone through a couple changes, it still rings true in this Pilot. It's always interesting to see two characters who are best friends and who could not be more different in their sober state. They challenge each other which makes for good chemistry among friends. One of my favorite scenes or I should say set of scenes is the Miami trip. Why it is my favorite section is because I pictured it so clearly, like watching it on TV, and it was super hilarious. The whole 'I'm in Miami, B...' and the face plant followed by the 'Yeahhh!' had me in stitches.

My only critique, if I was going to have one, would be showing the phone-call and message left for the Dean without giving any inkling of the Photoshop/Craigslist Ad idea brewing, because it almost comes off like two different ideas you had for him being kicked out of Columbia and you just couldn't decide on which. Even putting in a simple 'I know a way to emphasis my point' or something along the lines that more ideas on how to get back at the Dean and the faculty was brewing in drunk Dylan's brain would help connect those dots, I feel. There were some SPAG errors, but nothing that a good once over couldn't fix.

All-in-all I enjoyed the Pilot episode. I'm going to read the second episode, but I just wanted to say that this episode didn't feel like a two-parter in any way. It felt complete and a great start to the story.

** REVIEW ** 1.01 - 'Return to the Free Lands'

I'm always very intimidated to read a Virtual Series where the pitch describes this huge world and ideas because I get fearful that if I don't understand some of the things in the pitch I won't be able to follow the story in the pilot, that didn't happen in this case. Although a lot of information of the world's history is given in the Pitch it wasn't a necessity to know every in and out of the world in order to understand what was happening in the Pilot.

The opening caught and kept my attention. I got a little bit confused between the destruction of the SMS Invincible and the African Savannah because it read as if the events were taking place directly after one another. Even putting in a simple such-and-such Years(months) later or a Present Day would have distinguish that these two scenes, and the ones that follow, take place a distance of time apart.

Whenever you're dealing with a Virtual Series with such a huge mythology some things tend to get lost in translation, or dialogue becomes very flat, because you're trying to explain to your viewers 'what is what' and 'who is who'. I am notorious for creating dialogue that is straight on the nose, especially in a Pilot because I am trying to fit a huge amount of mythology into 50-60 pages so that the following episodes are not so wooden, for lack of a better term. In this Pilot, I feel like you achieved a balance between explaining your mythology and telling a good story. There were some instances I felt went a little bit too far and too straight on the nose, an example would be Storme and Collins meeting for the first time and him flat out saying 'Might want to tell me your story before you shoot me?' and after some bantering she tells him how she exists in both worlds. I don't know if it's that particular line that gnaws at me in that section of dialogue but it's definitely the one that stands out the most. Out of all the character interactions in this Pilot that scenes dialogue is probably the one I feel needs some sort of tweaking.

Speaking of mythology, I have to say how impressed I am with how fully realized both your world and its history is. It's solid. The characters are very distinctive as well. It was easy to picture the characters by their dialogue alone. It was really good. There's a couple SPAG errors throughout that can easily be fixed with a good beta reader or even going over it again yourself. Nothing too huge. Overall I liked the episode. It was definitely a solid start to what I think will be a great story. Thumbs up from me