Thank you so much Jay! Your message made me so happy and I am glad that you like Willa too. In the beginning I searched for a long time and I guess I just started to lose faith. I am grateful for my friends and supporters in those moments because they give me the right push and tell me not to be dumb XD. I am considering releasing another preview or something maybe from the second episode to keep the interest up and also for those wonderful people who are still interested and can't wait for more.
Alright I have posted a second sneak peek to the Pilot in the first post. I'm sorry if the formatting is a bit wonky I rushed a little bit in my excitement to put it up. Feel free to post your thoughts and comments!
Post by Matthew James on Nov 25, 2011 20:31:47 GMT -6
I have to say I love Myth, to death. There is just something about it, in a good way. I can't believe I havent posted a comment about this yet, but love this pitch It's amazing, and well I am slightly intoxicated (hey what can I say I am a writer (: ) I especially love Willa as a lead, ever since the OC and I don't know if you ever read the virtual series Lilly the vampire Slayer I've always thought she could be a leading actor.
I've always loved the idea of a series revolved around just witches and I honsetly feel as if though I brought this up before but it's nothing but coincedence that the secret circle aired the same time. It's like the vampire diaries and twilight, both amazing yet different stories to tell. and for the record this one seems far more promising.
All the characters come across as different and unique though to be honest and this may just be the whisky talking. But and we can discuss this in the morning and please don't be mad at me Garrett. It feels like you gave to much away about him, no offence. I'm so gonna get killed. But I would rather read about a charcter thinking he's a dick and than discover as the series goes on ohh he has a heart and a big one at that. Than knowing he's secretly a good guy off the bat. It makes more a more interesting character Hopefully I said all that without making myself sound like a dick. lol.
But I do really love this idea and this show and general and would really love to see this air on the VPN, you officially got my vote
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We can certainly talk about Garrett! I am not going to kill you, instead I am going to let you in on a secret....I am nervous when it comes to Garrett. Mainly it is because the two of us have a love-hate relationship I think he is hilarious but he does some pretty bad things. He can be a total jerk but deep down is pretty black and white on the idea of good and evil. Which is why he can be a good person. He doesn't exactly have the best morals and he does hurt people to get what he wants. I don't wanna give to much away but he has done some rather crappy things to his friends. If you wanna talk just send me a PM or catch me on aim I am always on.
edit: Also thank you SO much for the faith and support in the show!! I am glad somebody other than me loves it!
The opening teaser was good. It was a tad predictable but as I read on I forgave that because the scene was one of many things. First off it was a crucial part of the Voodou mythology in that Zombies can sense magic. Voodou (not sure if this is a spelling error or is this the way you intend to spell the word Voodoo?). Secondly it foreshadowed another great escape that ended very differently. So the teaser turned out to be terrific. Your descriptions of people, places and things painted a detailed picture for the viewer which really helped in bringing us into the world you are creating. Your dialogue at first seemed to stumble a bit (in my opinion) but as the script went on and you became comfortable with your characters it became flawless. Each character had a distinct voice and so you did a fantastic job with that. Noah is my favorite character. Yes I have a favorite character already. His total disregard of the dangerous situation that Jackie had just gone through and the situation they are in (inside the warehouse) was simply hilarious. His cell conversation with Gabrielle made me laugh out loud, literally. Zombies sensing power great mythology and great way to tie in the plot, especially how it explains why the Zombie was after Jackie to begin with. All-in-all it was a GREAT pilot. My only concern lies in the fact that the main conflict of the pilot episode was resolved in Act II. This left two acts of mythology explanation and set up for the second episode. I think this could be resolved with another round of zombie attacks or a run in with The Bokor. Possibly moving the union of The Bokor and Uriel til after this second wave. Just my opinion, take it as you want. But like I said I loved the Pilot.
Great job!!!! I look forward to seeing this come to light, because I think this would be an awesome series!! Two spelling errors found were:
NOAH (CONT'D) Garrett, this is Jackie, and she was just headed...
Sorry about the predictability, but I'm glad the story made up for it later. And yes I had intended to spell it "Vodou" instead of "Voodoo". The double "o" spelling is am Americanized way of spelling it and I wanted to go for the more Haitian/African way of spelling it, which was also why I used the word Bokor.
I will say the dialogue might need some work and I can certainly give that another look over with my editor, she is generally good at telling what is off. I am RELIEVED that the characters had distinct voices later on. Characterization is always something I am worried about, especially Noah because he has several sides to him and I don't want to seem inconsistent. BUT you liked him so YAY! He does make me laugh a lot, especially with Jackie because that is when he doesn't act like a stiff.
As far as the last half of the episode dragging I wasn't sure how to alter that because lots of explanation and foreshadowing was in there. However, I was going to post the first two episodes in one night if it had been picked up.
Thank you for pointing out the grammar errors. My editor shall be punished severely for missing those. JK! I love her. I'm pleased you enjoyed this episode! I was afraid nobody would ever like it. I have a LOT of plans for this series and I still hope that someday it can be on the VPN.
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It was just the beginning dialogue, mostly things like "watching wet paint dry diner". It was just hard to read and say out loud. But it got a lot better! You truly have a grasp of who your characters are. As for the dragging in the second half, the mythology scene with the group explaining what Jackie is and such was fine. I didn't feel it dragged so much as it reached it's climax and then that was it. I think that scene would be a perfect time for the second wave of attacks, that way it would also snap Jackie into reality where she sees the sort of danger she is really in and that would also make her not put up such a fight about going home and forgetting everything. Her walk home could be cut shorter to Noah and her walking up to her front door. Just opinions. I don't want you to feel I am stepping on your toes. Like I said I really loved the story!!