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Post by Brian Melanson on Jan 8, 2011 10:30:38 GMT -6
"Savior" was a good episode. It wasn't great, but it was far from terrible. I'm sort of busy doing something at the moment, but wanted to jot my thoughts down. Here's a pros and cons list: + The main story that was interesting to me was the Mellie arc, that involved Chris. I'm not sure when they came up, probably before this one (but the link was broken), but it was really interesting. + Brad's appearances are really exciting. + Grammatical errors, and spelling mistakes are very limited. I think MJ's editing has done this show a HUGE favor. - I'm still not enjoying Jenny's character, however, which is a bit of a let down. She has some good moments in this episode, a much lighter side to her, which was great, but still, not feeling her character as much as I'd wish I could. - Another character I'm not liking is Henry. He seems to get a lot of cliche dialogue and - From what I know what happens, I don't like the fact that Jenny could 'see the future' or at least 'dream of what's going to happen in the future.' I know you wanted to tease what was going to happen, at a layer of mystery, but I didn't like Jenny having that particular dream and then it happening. 7.5/10 - one of the better episodes of the season. Alright thanks Jack! Really insitful lol I know this episode had some confusing thing but i really wanted to foreshadow stuff lol. But what do you think I can do to improve on jenny and Henry? lol I would like to know anything to help the show  but thanks for the review |
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Post by Jack Malone on Jan 8, 2011 14:19:01 GMT -6
^^ I'm not sure. Maybe its a wait and see where her character goes, but Jenny is probably my least favourite character (not to say she doesn't have her moments). I think you're trying too hard to hit an element of emotion in the first few episodes where she just comes off as a major bitch. I think you need to tone down the yelling and screaming, and how she often directs that at her friends. Plus, for someone who has gotten a second chance at life, she tends to not seem grateful. The pilot was great because it looked like NOW she was on a new Path, and becoming a better person, but with the temptation storyline, I think you've lost sight of that turning point in the pilot. I don't think she's changed that much, despite her drinking problems.
And Henry, its nothing big. Just this episode I didn't like him. He got a lot of cliche dialogue, and it didn't do much for me. That's all.
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Post by Keisha on Apr 22, 2011 9:50:06 GMT -6
Dusting off my reviewer cap, getting back into the swing of things.
First off, it's nice to see how you've grown as a writer. I remember my earliest critique of the show was that you relied heavily on punctuation to show emotion which took me out of the story. Now, you're relying on the dialog.
JENNY (V.O.)
It’s strange...I have memories of
Harlan...but it’s like I don’t
remember his face, his voice, and
not even the way he made me feel,
and the way he made me feel was
that...there was actually a chance
that I would overcome this drinking
addiction...but now that he’s
gone...I just don’t know...
In that I see a lot of progress and props to MJ for stepping up as editor. She helped the show a great deal with grammar and things like that.
In terms of story, we've always known this was your strong point. You're great at creating storylines and it really shows off here. Having Jenny's dad come back? Really excited to see more of her history and the part he played in her drinking.
I loved Holly's reveal to Bennett. The "sperm...egg...baby" line was cute and funny. What struck me as weird was Bennett referring to the baby as a mistake and Holly not saying anything about that.The scene is about them loving each other no matter what and the "mistake" slip up going unnoticed sort of undermines that.
And baby crazy! Alyson is also pregnant! Will there be baby showers? I hope so because there are great opportunities to bring out cutesey and fun situations.
Jenny has been a tug of war for me. In the beginning I thought she was okay but it irritates me how she doesn't seem to have any self actualization. She acknowledges her drinking problem but it's still implied that other forces are causing her to do that. I think one way to help is to have her come to things on her own instead of having the other characters tell her. Like the scene at Harlan's grave. I think it would be nice to have Jenny just say that the addiction is her own fault. These are her choices. I also think she should go back to rehab because she's dealing with her addiction through avoidance which will only lead to relapse. Summary: I think Jenny just needs to find her own strength. That's the only way she'll recover.
Overall, though, I like where this show is going. Still can't believe that Harland is dead. Boo. But you're giving me some great plot developments when this could fall into stale territory. Great job on your part. Just be mindful of Jenny's development because I don't think she's made that much progress and it's starting to wear on me.
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Post by Keisha on Apr 22, 2011 9:54:00 GMT -6
Oh and the watch for cliche. You've gotten better at handling that but it's still noticable. Ie) Henry's "I can never love again" that threw me off but Mellie's line after that kinda saved it for me. "You sound like a cheesy romance novel." lol More humor like that about the lines helps.
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Post by Brian Melanson on Apr 22, 2011 13:09:29 GMT -6
Oh and the watch for cliche. You've gotten better at handling that but it's still noticable. Ie) Henry's "I can never love again" that threw me off but Mellie's line after that kinda saved it for me. "You sound like a cheesy romance novel." lol More humor like that about the lines helps. LOL Thanks! Im glad you liked it and yes there will be baby Shower(s) lol it's coming soon! But that will not be till the end of the season lol But thanks for the review glad to see you reviewing it! =D |
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Post by Matthew James on Apr 24, 2011 7:04:58 GMT -6
So, Brian. I wanted you to know that even though I don't always have time to give a review I do read The Path I'm going to try getting back into reviewing so i've read "Burns" "Sometime Hope is needed" "The Forbidden Fruit" and "Take Me Home" I'm oddly reading them backwards which could explain why the story doesnt always make sence lmao. So for this time I will do one review for all the episodes I mentioned jumbled into one review. I think you've worked them together as a family really well. Though I have to agree with everyone on the fact the glue that holds this group together -- *Jenny is the weakest part of the group in all sence of the word. There is something about her that makes her unlikable which makes it hard to pull or care about her. I liked her until the relapse story line I agree with Kesha about the fact that Jenny desperatly needs Rehab. * When it comes to Mellie and Henry I kind of love them both equally they make a great support system for Jenny which is something she seems to need alot. * As a writer you seem to have grown a lot from your VAMP days  I love The Path and the direction you take it, I wish even though she is your main protagonist that you would veer off all the Jenny heavy story lines and give Henry and Mellie something to do other than be reactive characters. I can't wait to read nine later today which I will give a full review of |
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Post by Jack Malone on Jun 7, 2011 9:37:23 GMT -6
Review: "Daddy Dearest" ~ The Path Not Taken
"Daddy Dearest" brings Jenny's father back after fifteen years of being gone, and Jenny is struggling with the decision of welcoming him with open arms in hopes of uncovering the truth or leaving him in the past where she once believed he belonged. Things take a turn for the worst when Jenny learns that ... she has a sister!
I didn't feel like this episode hit the emotional impact it was going for due to the repetition in this storyline. By that, I mean you introduced the father, and then Jenny was reacting in some normal ways, wondering why he wasn't there for her, and what he was doing back now, and then you introduce the fact that Jenny has a sister and ... well Alana does the exact same thing in the second half of the script that it just ruins the impact of this revelation from Jenny's POV. Maybe it would have been a good idea to introduce the
'sister' shock in the following episode as Jenny came to terms with the return of her father.
Jenny has been such a pathetic character these past 10 episodes. I was so happy to see that finally being addressed and her life being turned around. I'm actually excited to see where this new path choice has taken her. When Jenny started to realise that she hasn't taken advantage of her second chance, and then she decided to do something with her life now ... it was such a big moment. I think its renewed my faith in this series. Unfortunately that was probably the only really good thing I liked about this episode ...
The whole purpose of Jenny's Dad returning was ruined at the end of the episode when he said she wasn't his daughter. If that was all that he came back for why was he trying so hard to get back into her life? Why was he making things worse for her? He seemed incredibly sincere at the beginning of the episode I was actually getting sick of Jenny not letting him explain himself. But then at the end ... it just didn't make any sense. I understand the twist, but it was so unpredictable in a sense that it contradicted the character's entire purpose of being in the episode (from what we saw in the majority of his scenes).
So is Alana really Jenny's sister? Is Harlen really Jenny's brother? Or does that mean Jenny is adopted? Or do they all just share the same mother? I was so confused at the end of the episode.
There were actually some other great scenes I enjoyed. I really liked Henry in this episode. I felt that he remained as the most mature character in the episode - he really helped Jenny realise a few things about herself, and it was really his little push that I think nudged Jenny into the right direction. I also liked the shocking return of Brad at episode's end. I thought that was a great cliffhanger. And I really enjoyed the flashbacks and how you incorporated them, despite one particular flashback in which Jenny was remembering, even though she wasn't THERE. I'll just assume she overheard and us as the audience got the satisfaction of actually seeing it instead of hearing it ...
Ultimately, I *DID* enjoy this episode. I think there were a lot of flaws, but ultimately, the turning point in Jenny's character made it really stand out to me, and the conversation between Alana and Jenny was very moving. I could definitely see a lot of yourself in this script, Brian, at least in the scenes about Alana discussing her father. And I know I've hated on Jenny a lot this season because she has, in all honesty, come off as a "whiny little bitch" as Jenny called herself in the episode, but she has had a lot of tragedy in her life. And I can understand a lot of that. So despite my feelings on her personality, I don't let that cloud my understanding of her pain and suffering.
I think it would be interesting to do a sort of 'what if' episode. I know this is a drama series and it would have to be done in a way that doesn't add a supernatural element to it, even if that means it ends up being all a dream ... but I would love it if we saw Jenny leading a life where her father never left, her brother didn't die, she never met Brad, and she never got hit by a car. I'm interested to see the life she would lead had she not experienced so much tragedy. Maybe Jenny finds an old diary entry where she hears herself wishing that she could change her life, and when she goes to sleep she "wakes up" in this perfect world. I think it would be a fun episode.
6/10 ~ A balance of good and bad moments; solid character development threaded through with a couple of flaws. Overall an enjoyable episode.
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Post by Brian Melanson on Jun 7, 2011 13:26:54 GMT -6
Review: "Daddy Dearest" ~ The Path Not Taken "Daddy Dearest" brings Jenny's father back after fifteen years of being gone, and Jenny is struggling with the decision of welcoming him with open arms in hopes of uncovering the truth or leaving him in the past where she once believed he belonged. Things take a turn for the worst when Jenny learns that ... she has a sister! I didn't feel like this episode hit the emotional impact it was going for due to the repetition in this storyline. By that, I mean you introduced the father, and then Jenny was reacting in some normal ways, wondering why he wasn't there for her, and what he was doing back now, and then you introduce the fact that Jenny has a sister and ... well Alana does the exact same thing in the second half of the script that it just ruins the impact of this revelation from Jenny's POV. Maybe it would have been a good idea to introduce the 'sister' shock in the following episode as Jenny came to terms with the return of her father. Jenny has been such a pathetic character these past 10 episodes. I was so happy to see that finally being addressed and her life being turned around. I'm actually excited to see where this new path choice has taken her. When Jenny started to realise that she hasn't taken advantage of her second chance, and then she decided to do something with her life now ... it was such a big moment. I think its renewed my faith in this series. Unfortunately that was probably the only really good thing I liked about this episode ... The whole purpose of Jenny's Dad returning was ruined at the end of the episode when he said she wasn't his daughter. If that was all that he came back for why was he trying so hard to get back into her life? Why was he making things worse for her? He seemed incredibly sincere at the beginning of the episode I was actually getting sick of Jenny not letting him explain himself. But then at the end ... it just didn't make any sense. I understand the twist, but it was so unpredictable in a sense that it contradicted the character's entire purpose of being in the episode (from what we saw in the majority of his scenes). So is Alana really Jenny's sister? Is Harlen really Jenny's brother? Or does that mean Jenny is adopted? Or do they all just share the same mother? I was so confused at the end of the episode. There were actually some other great scenes I enjoyed. I really liked Henry in this episode. I felt that he remained as the most mature character in the episode - he really helped Jenny realise a few things about herself, and it was really his little push that I think nudged Jenny into the right direction. I also liked the shocking return of Brad at episode's end. I thought that was a great cliffhanger. And I really enjoyed the flashbacks and how you incorporated them, despite one particular flashback in which Jenny was remembering, even though she wasn't THERE. I'll just assume she overheard and us as the audience got the satisfaction of actually seeing it instead of hearing it ... Ultimately, I *DID* enjoy this episode. I think there were a lot of flaws, but ultimately, the turning point in Jenny's character made it really stand out to me, and the conversation between Alana and Jenny was very moving. I could definitely see a lot of yourself in this script, Brian, at least in the scenes about Alana discussing her father. And I know I've hated on Jenny a lot this season because she has, in all honesty, come off as a "whiny little bitch" as Jenny called herself in the episode, but she has had a lot of tragedy in her life. And I can understand a lot of that. So despite my feelings on her personality, I don't let that cloud my understanding of her pain and suffering. I think it would be interesting to do a sort of 'what if' episode. I know this is a drama series and it would have to be done in a way that doesn't add a supernatural element to it, even if that means it ends up being all a dream ... but I would love it if we saw Jenny leading a life where her father never left, her brother didn't die, she never met Brad, and she never got hit by a car. I'm interested to see the life she would lead had she not experienced so much tragedy. Maybe Jenny finds an old diary entry where she hears herself wishing that she could change her life, and when she goes to sleep she "wakes up" in this perfect world. I think it would be a fun episode. 6/10 ~ A balance of good and bad moments; solid character development threaded through with a couple of flaws. Overall an enjoyable episode. Thanks Jack for reviewing! And I the whole story with Jenny's 'father' was to add a sense of closure for their story but I thought I wanted to expand on it. So we will learn in an upcoming episode that Jenny's Sister Riley knew the truth and that they were trying to keep a secret. I do plan to Bring Jenny's mother back in the next episode for her to clear up a few things but I really wanted that whole your not my daughter thing to show how desperate Jenny is for a father figure in her life. It's what she wants most someone to be there for her. As for the maturity thing I'M SO HAPPY YOU APPROVE! Thanks for that! I was so scared by how you would take it. So I'm very happy you liked it!  I will address the Jenny's life more next season which is where we could possibly meet Jenny's real father and her having a moment of chance to actually have a real father for once in her life. Next week is the Brad/Jenny episode that changes everything and I hope everyone will enjoy it! As for your idea for an episode....I REALLY like it! I may actually do that next season if that's okay with you? Because that sounds like it would be a lot of fun. 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Post by Brian Melanson on Jun 11, 2011 6:17:18 GMT -6
Hey you guys! So I know that the second half of the season of the Path has been very enjoyable for some people for seeing Jenny grow up and finally embrace her second chance by going to college and trying to learn how to help people! I hope you all like that storyline! As for episodes! They will not be coming back until July maybe. I am going on vacation and I am going to be using my mom's laptop! And If we can get Wi-fi (Hopefully through my cellphone) Then I can maybe air episodes! "1.11: Taking it all Back" will probably air this Thursday! But it all depends on how things go. So if you guys bear with me I promise that 'The Path' will be concluding it's first season soon! And just for some other news it will be the first series I have ever created that will reach a First Season Finale! So I would just like to say thank you to everyone on the VPN for enjoying this series and having enough confidence in me after the V.A.M.P days to come back and do this wonderful series! I am so happy to be working with all of these brilliant writers that create amazing shows! The VPN has grown so much! And I am glad to be apart of this family! I love you guys! Hope to talk to you all soon! |
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Post by Jack Malone on Jul 8, 2011 6:00:16 GMT -6
Excited to see the rest of the season play out, Brian! Congratulations on this being your first VPN series to reach a season finale. I can't wait to see it! |
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Post by Brian Melanson on Jul 8, 2011 10:44:11 GMT -6
Excited to see the rest of the season play out, Brian! Congratulations on this being your first VPN series to reach a season finale. I can't wait to see it! Thanks Jack! Im trying to write the episodes but it's Summer for me and Im having too much fun lol! It's hard to believe that in one week is the Anniversary of the Path airing lol....wow it took me an entire year to write one season hahahah |
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Post by Brian Melanson on Jul 19, 2011 7:51:34 GMT -6
I am soooo sorry the last few episodes are late but I have been very busy this summer lol But I am trying Episode 11 is done and I have episode 13 and 14 planned but episode 12 is really complicated to plan but I have a plan for the episode so I hope you all will bear with me and guess what
THE PATH IS ONE YEAR OLD!!! lol YAY! Sorry just wanted to celebrate that lol but thanks for staying with the show
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Post by Jack Malone on Jul 28, 2011 20:55:54 GMT -6
YEEES! A new episode! I've got a lot to read this weekend - the Path Not Taken has joined the list. I'm really excited to see how the rest of the season plays out, especially since the 'turning point' of the season. |
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Post by Brian Melanson on Jul 28, 2011 22:37:12 GMT -6
YEEES! A new episode! I've got a lot to read this weekend - the Path Not Taken has joined the list. I'm really excited to see how the rest of the season plays out, especially since the 'turning point' of the season. YAY! And its the last episode before we determine a characters fate and if they will stay in Jennys life! Its going to be an awesome way to close the season! |
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Post by Jack Malone on Sept 6, 2011 1:09:52 GMT -6
Review: "Leap of Faith" ~ The Path Not Taken.
I have mixed feelings about the season finale. There was a lot of great drama, and all the main characters got a lot of focus. I really enjoyed Jenny's struggle towards wanting Henry to stay, but not wanting him to give up on his dreams, especially for her. I liked the follow up from the big showdown between Brad and Jenny, how the FBI were trying to solve everything, and the final scene was definitely one to remember. Jenny is about to embark on a new path, hopefully one that is less tragic, and filled with more happiness.
My complaints? The script was too short, and felt extremely rushed in the majority of the episode. I felt there wasn't much going on, and what was, wasn't exactly being handled in a way that hit all the right emotional beats. The dialogue felt very much copy and pasted in a lot of scenes -- in that, what was said in one scene, was repeated in another, and another, and another. I think you should have gone back and re-read the episode, and edited it. There were a lot of mistakes, which makes me wonder if MJ edited it? I'm under the impression she didn't. And last of all, my only other big complaint is that a lot of romantic dialogue began to verge on the side of 'sappy' and 'cliche.' I know there are REAL relationships that are so over the top lovey dovey, but on TV, and in stories, it just doesn't work for me. Its those types of relationships that feels like nails on a chalkboard.
However, the drama threaded throughout the episode, and main storyline between Jenny and Henry, were what carried the episode for me. I love how mature Jenny has become, and how much she has been through has helped shape her into this new woman. I'm excited to see what your plans are for season two, and I know there'll be a lot of discussion on the renewal process. I'm extremely excited about the fact that you have finished your first season, and were able to conclude the season the way you wanted. Over the moon happy about that, to be honest.
Although the season ended without a huge cliffhanger, there was that small *will she, won't she* scene where Chris proposed to Mellie. I would have liked a description of what her reaction was. Was she shocked? Was she happy? Was she neutral towards it? Did she have any feelings towards it? All it said was "we push in on her reaction..." and then the scene ends. That bugged me a little.
There was only one other scene that bugged me enough to get a special mention -- and I hate nitpicking through the episode, but I like to rant -- Chris' interview scene just didn't seem believable. When Chris is asked about the things he could do to make a lesson more fun at the school, he basically says 'play games, watch moves...' I think, a principal of a school wouldn't take that as an excellet response. There is a syllabus, so when the Principal asks Chris about what he would teach in his lessons ... it just doesn't make any sense to me. Chris would have to map out his lessons by the syllabus of what the students NEED to learn, and understand, by a certain point. I just feel like it could have been worded better. Then, the main thing that annoyed me was how the Principal basically dissed her entire staff at the school. It just wouldn't happen. But, in the end, I must admit, I was excited about the fact that where Chris would be working could lead into a possible sexual harrassment storyline, as Paulette was CLEARLY trying to hit on him, and flirt with him. The directions that could go in have me excited to see if anything would come of it in a possible second season. So, nitpicking aside, that should be good.
Overall, I'm sitting on the fence with this one. On one hand, I'm really in love with the storyline of the episode. I felt that Jenny's struggle on what to do really emphasised the journey she's been on since the start of the season, and it sort of all came full circle, with Jenny finally embracing that second chance, having now changed her life around, and about to start a new journey. However, all the complaints I have above sort of brought the episode and excitement down for me, and the main thing I want to stress is that you should edit your episodes a lot more and spend more time on perfecting everything.
Anyway, I'm going to give this episode a 6.5/10. Sorry for the rant, haha.
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Post by Brian Melanson on Sept 6, 2011 4:21:12 GMT -6
Review: "Leap of Faith" ~ The Path Not Taken.I have mixed feelings about the season finale. There was a lot of great drama, and all the main characters got a lot of focus. I really enjoyed Jenny's struggle towards wanting Henry to stay, but not wanting him to give up on his dreams, especially for her. I liked the follow up from the big showdown between Brad and Jenny, how the FBI were trying to solve everything, and the final scene was definitely one to remember. Jenny is about to embark on a new path, hopefully one that is less tragic, and filled with more happiness. My complaints? The script was too short, and felt extremely rushed in the majority of the episode. I felt there wasn't much going on, and what was, wasn't exactly being handled in a way that hit all the right emotional beats. The dialogue felt very much copy and pasted in a lot of scenes -- in that, what was said in one scene, was repeated in another, and another, and another. I think you should have gone back and re-read the episode, and edited it. There were a lot of mistakes, which makes me wonder if MJ edited it? I'm under the impression she didn't. And last of all, my only other big complaint is that a lot of romantic dialogue began to verge on the side of 'sappy' and 'cliche.' I know there are REAL relationships that are so over the top lovey dovey, but on TV, and in stories, it just doesn't work for me. Its those types of relationships that feels like nails on a chalkboard. However, the drama threaded throughout the episode, and main storyline between Jenny and Henry, were what carried the episode for me. I love how mature Jenny has become, and how much she has been through has helped shape her into this new woman. I'm excited to see what your plans are for season two, and I know there'll be a lot of discussion on the renewal process. I'm extremely excited about the fact that you have finished your first season, and were able to conclude the season the way you wanted. Over the moon happy about that, to be honest. Although the season ended without a huge cliffhanger, there was that small *will she, won't she* scene where Chris proposed to Mellie. I would have liked a description of what her reaction was. Was she shocked? Was she happy? Was she neutral towards it? Did she have any feelings towards it? All it said was "we push in on her reaction..." and then the scene ends. That bugged me a little. There was only one other scene that bugged me enough to get a special mention -- and I hate nitpicking through the episode, but I like to rant -- Chris' interview scene just didn't seem believable. When Chris is asked about the things he could do to make a lesson more fun at the school, he basically says 'play games, watch moves...' I think, a principal of a school wouldn't take that as an excellet response. There is a syllabus, so when the Principal asks Chris about what he would teach in his lessons ... it just doesn't make any sense to me. Chris would have to map out his lessons by the syllabus of what the students NEED to learn, and understand, by a certain point. I just feel like it could have been worded better. Then, the main thing that annoyed me was how the Principal basically dissed her entire staff at the school. It just wouldn't happen. But, in the end, I must admit, I was excited about the fact that where Chris would be working could lead into a possible sexual harrassment storyline, as Paulette was CLEARLY trying to hit on him, and flirt with him. The directions that could go in have me excited to see if anything would come of it in a possible second season. So, nitpicking aside, that should be good. Overall, I'm sitting on the fence with this one. On one hand, I'm really in love with the storyline of the episode. I felt that Jenny's struggle on what to do really emphasised the journey she's been on since the start of the season, and it sort of all came full circle, with Jenny finally embracing that second chance, having now changed her life around, and about to start a new journey. However, all the complaints I have above sort of brought the episode and excitement down for me, and the main thing I want to stress is that you should edit your episodes a lot more and spend more time on perfecting everything. Anyway, I'm going to give this episode a 6.5/10. Sorry for the rant, haha. Jack everything you said is all taken with open arms! Next season (If I get there lol) Will be a little more focused I will write the episodes ahead of time, storyboard them, and then go back and edit them. But things you said are really just ways to help improve the show and with a second season I will be so happy to show that to all you guys and not just rush the episodes and just air them which I've been doing lol. Even though the rating is not as well as I thought it would be, Im happy you enjoyed some parts of it and Thank you for reviewing! Season Two will have a little bit more focus on the writing . But thank you! I am happy I am concluded with this season and I hope if Season Two does come around then I am ready for the challenge. |
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Post by Jack Malone on Sept 6, 2011 8:14:36 GMT -6
^^ Don't get me wrong, I loved the finale. The drama was very exciting, primarily between Jenny and Henry. There were just those other things that brought it down for me. And I would love to see a second season, to be honest. I think this show has a lot of life left in it, and I don't think I'm ready for it to go off the air. I'll have to read your pitch though. I think its exciting to see where Jenny/Henry goes, what Chris' work environment is like next year, if Mellie decides to get married, and if we'll see a wedding, engagement party, etc. The temptations in a new environment for Jenny also creates a lot of drama, so yeah, I think this show has a lot of life left into it.
The only major improvement you can make at this point Brian is to perfect your script. That's pretty much it, and all that implies is just editing it. xD
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Post by Brian Melanson on Sept 6, 2011 16:51:00 GMT -6
^^ Don't get me wrong, I loved the finale. The drama was very exciting, primarily between Jenny and Henry. There were just those other things that brought it down for me. And I would love to see a second season, to be honest. I think this show has a lot of life left in it, and I don't think I'm ready for it to go off the air. I'll have to read your pitch though. I think its exciting to see where Jenny/Henry goes, what Chris' work environment is like next year, if Mellie decides to get married, and if we'll see a wedding, engagement party, etc. The temptations in a new environment for Jenny also creates a lot of drama, so yeah, I think this show has a lot of life left into it. The only major improvement you can make at this point Brian is to perfect your script. That's pretty much it, and all that implies is just editing it. xD Wow...Thanks! You just made my day and my day was bad until I got home and got into Pottermore and I just read this and Now I am more determined to make Season 2 better (editing wise) lol but thanks jack! XD |
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I love The Path and the direction you take it, I wish even though she is your main protagonist that you would veer off all the Jenny heavy story lines and give Henry and Mellie something to do other than be reactive characters. I can't wait to read nine later today which I will give a full review of 
