Post by fivebyfive on Aug 16, 2010 13:20:32 GMT -6
Thank you very much for reading! It makes me feel good to know someone's read it.
Ah, that scene, I fiddled around with the times a lot in that scene so I guess I messed up pretty bad. Sorry, I'll fix that.
I'm glad you like Hatty. As for the other characters, this was very much Lily's episode, the other characters where just there to establish them. Like Lily, they'll have centre episodes which will flesh them out more and explain them.
"Inferno Girl" was kind of meant to be ironic, seeing as she's the darkest of all the characters yet she has the most campy name. Also, it was meant to be a throw back to old superheroes from "back in the day". But I agree, it isn't very good.
EDIT: Well, things had gotten really busy so I haven't been able to do much on this recently but I've got some free time now.
So, I've finished the first half of act 2 now, and I hopefully I will up it up soonish.
UPDATE: Well, I've just finished Act 3. Hopefully, I may have it up by the end of tonight, if not, I'll get it up by next Sunday, as I'm going away tomorrow morning.
Thanks for the advice! I would choose a solid cast but I'm not directly sure. Like, I'm pretty sure I'd want Amy Acker as the Lily (and the main role for the pilot) and I quite like the idea of Pink as Natalie but I'm not so sure on Eliza Dushku, as much as I love her!
As for them all being masked, well, vigilantism is illegal so I couldn't have them just have them out with their real face, they'd get arrested! Also, there will be a huge supporting cast (especially for Lily) and the other vigilante's won't know who each other's real identity is up until a certain point. Saying this, I do agree with you, having them all masked might make it difficult, but it will still be fun!
As for the pilot, well, I'm currently writing my 3rd draft of the teaser! I just couldn't get it right. Although I think the latest teaser is much better then the first two. I may have the pilot up by Saturday because I've had little time to work on it up until now because of exams but it's certainly been fun writing it.
Thank you very much for the comments. I really do appreciate them. And if anyone can come up with any better names then I already have that would be greatly appreciated, I'm not too happy with them at the moment.
Oh, and The Cape? Is that quite new? I might have to look it up.
Jack Lord became one of the most famous faces in Spiritus City recently. He was going to the one to end the infamous Danes Crime family and bring the city out of the abyss of crime it was in. Unfortunately, he is murdered in cold blood the night before the court case. His fiancé, Lily Faith, seeks justice but in a city of Spiritus City, justice is hard to come by. The police won’t help her so she takes things into her own hands...
She tracks down Jack’s killer and, overcome with emotions, she killed him. However, she found out that the killer was simply working for someone else, a shadowy figure who's identity is unknown but is named "The Woman in the Red Dress" by most people.
Wanting to help the citizens of Spiritus City, Lily becomes a masked vigilante known as “The White Light” and protects the city.
But she’s not alone. Sparking something inside several other people around Spiritus City, several new Vigilante’s surface but can they really protect this city from itself? Or will they destroy each other first...
The show will generally have quite a dark theme with a little bit of humour thrown in. It will be an action/drama which is based more about how the Heroes have different morals and how these morals clash. Each season will have a main villain (as well as one big villain who will appear in the first season and their identity will not be revealed to the second or third season) and there will be a main arch to each series.
Bare in mind all the cast members are purely hypothetical, I might not end up using a lot of them for the actual thing.
Lily “The White Light” Faith (Amy Acker)
Once, Lily Faith was simply another woman in Spiritus City. Granted, she was engaged to Jack Lord, one of the most powerful lawyers in the city, but she still lived a rather normal life. That all changed the night Jack was murdered in front of her. He was murdered by one of the most influential family in Spiritus City and when the police wouldn’t help her, she took matters into her own hands. She became “The White Light”, a masked vigilante, aiming to help the people of Spiritus when the police wouldn’t and protect them from the gangs, the thieves and the murderers.
Smart and clever, Lily has a strong sense of morals but her emotions often get in the way of her work.
Jayne “Prowler” Hammond (Kyle Gallner)
Everything about Jayne Hammond’s life was ordinary. Ordinary family. Ordinary school. Ordinary Friends. Nothing was unusual at all. That’s until he was walking back from gymnastics and decided to take a shortcut and was jumped by three thugs. Luckily for him, he was saved by The White Light but he managed to take on one of the thugs by himself. Impressed, the White Light took him on and trained him to be a crime fighter like herself. He soon became “The Prowler” and joined Lily on the streets, protecting and helping the citizens of Spiritus City.
Witty but hot-headed, Jayne acts before he thinks, which sometimes leaves him in some bad situations but he’s a good fighter and is ready for what’s out there.
Alex “Fist” Richards (Dominic Monaghan)
Once, he was a detective in Spiritus City but after saying some harsh words to his boss, Alex found himself unemployed, being deemed “unstable”. Furious, Alex knew he couldn’t just sit and watch Spiritus City crumble, he had to do something. He became his alter ego, FIST. Fist is harsh to the criminals of Spiritus City, leaving them close to death but not quite there.
Alex is strong and fast but has the tendency to go too far. He is still undecided on whether he feels he has the right to kill the criminals of Spiritus, like they have killed many others.
Natalie “The Runner” Burner (Alecia “P!nk” Moore)
Natalie Burner was simply bored with life and was seeking excitement when she decided to become a vigilante. She got way more then she bargained for. She became a masked vigilante she took on the criminals of Spiritus City. She works in the shadows, stalking her victims and picking them off one by one before fleeing the scene, earning her the name of “The Runner”. Unfortunately, she is at a disadvantage when it comes to hand to hand combat so she struggles in this area.
Natalie is friendly but has very strong views. She hates compromise and is a favourite when it comes to the Spiritus Vigilantes. She becomes friends with Inferno Girl through a strange series of events.
Hatty “Inferno” De Rast (Michelle Roudriguez)
She’d always been an angry girl and Hatty De Rast was always bitter ever since school. Travelling from psychiatrist to psychiatrist and from school to school, Hatty didn’t fit in anywhere. Her mother was a heroin addict and her father died before she was born, Hatty didn’t have the best start to life. One day, she was sitting alone in her apartment when four men broke in. They stole from her and then set fire to her house. Luckily, Hatty managed to escape. But something changed as she watched everything she owned burn. She became something different. She couldn’t just sit back and watch her city burn like her house, she had to do something.
She became Inferno Girl and hunted down and brought justice to the criminals of Spiritus City. “An eye for an eye” she believes. The only of the vigilantes to kill the criminals she feels deserve it which sparks a lot of controversy...
Simon “Warrior” Frost (Uncast)
Simon used to be a Bouncer at a local club until a group of gangsters came in and murdered everyone inside because the owner was “late” on a payment. Simon watched as the police did nothing and Simon became enraged as he saw innocent people die with no justice. He saw what The White Light was doing and decided to join her, becoming the Warrior of the innocent. Simon believes killing criminals makes a person just as bad as them so he and Inferno clash when it comes to dealing with criminals.
Simon may look like all muscles, but he has strong values and a good heart but everyone has their faults, don’t they...
Wilson Siegfried Siegfried used to be a well respected soldier in the army, that’s until his legs were blown off by a road side bomb and he was confined to a wheelchair. Since then, he has grown to live with his disability and has opened a weapon shop in Spiritus City Harbour. He was good friends with Lily’s parents and became Lily and Suzie’s guardian after the death of their parents. He was cautious at first when Lily told him she was planning to become a vigilante but he helped her nonetheless and soon realised she was exactly was this city needed.
Suzie Faith (Jewel Staite) Lily’s younger sister. She’s very optimistic and a good friend to Lily. She owns a British-style pub in Spiritus City where Lily works shifts. Suzie does not have a stable love life, going from boyfriend to boyfriend leaving Lily to deal with the mess each time.
Cassie "Patch" Patchers Cassie is in med-school and is the top of her class. She earned herself the knick name “Patch” from her friends as she is a brilliant doctor and also her last name. She was saved by The White Light on the night Lily was shot and saved Lily. Since then, she’s become a personal paramedic to the vigilante’s of the city and has made an oath not to tell anyone their identities.
Wendy Quintus (Jessy Schram) A friend of Jayne’s who is a computer genius. Her parents own a computer shop and Wendy became close friends with one of the employees who taught her how to hack and “use the full potential of computers”. She helps Prowler occasionally and she and Jayne are very close.
I’m only going to talk about a few episodes here for now but I have up to 4 seasons planned with an overarching villain (a “who dunnit” situation) and also another main villain(s) per each season.
1x01 CORRUPTION OF INNOCENCE (PILOT) Lily Faith and her fiancé, Jack Lord, are having a romantic dinner the night before Jack puts the head of a big Crime Family behind bars. However, Jack is murdered in cold blood and Lily seeks justice but in a city like Spiritus City, the only justice you can make is your own.
1x02 NEW FACES White Light is patrolling the streets when she comes across a teenage boy being attacked by three thugs, she helps him but finds he has already taken care of it. Impressed, Lily decides to find out whether the boy, Jayne, has the potential to be a masked Vigilante. Meanwhile, a detective named Alex Lockley is fired so he decides to become a vigilante named FIST and a Bouncer witnesses the massacre of the club he works at and decides he can’t sit by and just watch.
1x03 THE GOOD FIGHT Two new vigilante’s appear in Spiritus City, The Runner and Inferno Girl. The Runner teams up with Inferno Girl to stop a bank robbery, but she soon finds out Inferno Girl isn’t as safe to be around as she thinks. Meanwhile, Lily begins to teach Jayne. Warrior also tries to track down the kidnapper of a couple and finds a horrific discovery.
1x04 BLEEDING OUT Lily is injured on a night of patrolling but is saved by a young woman named Patch, who decides to open a medical centre for vigilantes in need of medical assistance. Elsewhere, Inferno Girl is tracking down a kidnapper but Warrior is on the same case and the values of the two of them clash.
1x05 THE WOMAN IN THE RED DRESS The Danes family used to be one of the most powerful families in Spiritus City, now, they’re nobodies. A woman referred only as “The Woman in the Red Dress” is apparently behind a big plan which will re-affirm the Danes Family as a power, she is going to assassinate the Mayor’s daughter. As our heroes rush out to save her, they realise that this woman is more trouble then she looks like.
1x06 – ALL ALONG THE WATCHTOWER 1x07 – DORMANCY 1x08 – INHUMAN 1x09-1x13 – Under Wraps
There are 13 episodes per series, each episode as an A Story and a B Story (and sometimes a C Story).
Wow, that was longer then I intended! I just wanted to give people a clear view of the characters as it is very character driven. I am currently halfway through writing the pilot and I will post this up as soon as possible.
10) Dollhouse - Epitaph One 9) Dollhouse - Omega 8) Buffy - Fool for Love 7) Firefly - Out of Gas 6) Angel - Dear Boy 5) Buffy - Becoming Part I 4) Firefly - Shindig 3) Buffy - The Body 2) Angel - Five by Five 1) Angel - A Hole in the World
1) I'm from a fostering family although I am not fostered myself. Currently, I have three sisters (Two adopted and have moved out but still are in regular contact) and a blood sister and two brothers (one foster but he's been here longer then I can remember so he's family) and a blood brother. I find fostering difficult sometimes but it's good to help.
2) My favourite FILM director/writer is Quentin Taratino, Joss Whedon is my favourite for TV. They both are what inspired me to write. Although, now when I listen to "Stuck In the Middle With You" I find it a bit eerie!
3) My Favourite band is either Nirvana or Florence and The Machine. I am also big fans of most genres of music except "pop" and "R'n'B" *shudder*. Honorable mentions go to Muse, Led Zeppelin and Rage Against the Machine.
4) I currently in the middle of developing a Virtual Series inspired by Watchmen, Buffy (the drama side, not the demons) and all things superhero-y. I hope to pitch this show up soon.
5) I have a 4 year old niece and a four month old nephew.
6) I love the Watchmen Graphic Novel. The film was okay.
7) The death of *spoiler* Fred in Angel devastated me. I loved the character and the episode almost brought tears to my eyes.
8) I am British.
9) My favourite comic book hero is Batman. He is really interesting but I prefer the more serious stuff to the campy old stuff, although a lot of the Adam West Batman is down right hilarious. I much prefer Tim Burton's Batman to the Nolan Batman and I think Michael Keaton is the superior Batman/Bruce Wayne.
I assume this isn't set in the current Christopher Nolan film timeline? I do think it's an awesome pitch (love the casting of Bell and Johnny Depp) but it if it isn't in the Nolan timeline wouldn't it be more suitable to cast different actors as the main characters? It might be a bit confusing. You've included my favourite villains: The Scarecrow and Haley Quinn which just is awesome.
Love the story, love the atmosphere it's giving and I just freakin' love the God Damn Batman! Can't wait to give this one a read.