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Post by Amin on Jun 18, 2010 3:52:49 GMT -6
Just started reading "Odyssey" and it looks good so far. I love Lana's "Yeah..." Pause, takes of mask "...I got 'em" introduction.
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Post by brandanfeguson on Jun 20, 2010 21:18:19 GMT -6
Okay I totally love the premiere. Though I also felt like their could have been more show of emotion. I was blown away by the creativity and your skill to keep me interested. I totally am interested in Quentin and Lana. He's no Clark and yet I could totally see them working. Have be interested if there will be a love triangle between them and Clark. The scene where Lana got the letter from Lex and shows such display of anger totally brought me back to Smallville's Season 7 "Wrath" scene which is incredible since i believe season 7 was a season that really showed she's human and isn't perfect. And I agree with Karl it's good to see that she still holds that hatred for Lex. The graveyard scene felt like a little shout out to pre-Clark Lana when she would visit her parents grave and the touching scene just pulled at my heart so i totally loved that. He seen so much realer after that scene for me anyway and made me more interested in him. Cynthia is an interesting one. I love that she is considered dangerous and powerful but doesn't seem to have any disastrous powers that we've seen yet. It gives more mystery to her and exactly why Amanda wants her. Not sure if I like the future scene, it kinda seemed out of place with how the premiere seemed like it was Lantin (Lana/Quentin, haha) even though it their relationship reminds me of early Clark/Chloe which causes me to wonder if Pete will be the Lana of the series and one that Lana will grow to want. Amanda Waller's introduction was awesome and epic and totally just brilliant. Loved her on Smallville but now you made me want to see just how her run is on Trinity. It's been two years and it would be cool to see a little continuity of Smallville here and there like with how Buffy and Angel's series were. Smallville made Lana who she was and I feel that it should at least be respected a little and mention cause Lana isn't exactly a cold person and she would probably want to know how her best friend and ex lover would be doing expressively with Lex being alive and well. Overall this was EPIC and I give it a 10/10. Keep up the good luck, Chris!  |
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Post by gamila on Jun 21, 2010 3:56:33 GMT -6
Lantin...that's cool ihihihihi :-)
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Post by brandanfeguson on Jun 21, 2010 8:56:10 GMT -6
Just finished reading Shock and you hasn't disappointed again, Chris! The action in this episode was great and realistic and the good part that it wasn't rushed. Lana wasn't to her fullish and she still held her own against a powerful meta. The twist with Virgil was interesting that Waller was actually controlling him. Sad that it's the last thing we saw of him. Wonder will Lana feel quilty now thinking it's her fault he died.
I love that Lana still keeps her High school year book and still has some feelings for Clark it seems. I would so like to see her journey to moving on from him even though it has been 2 years.
The Pete and Lana scene was nice, it was good that he hadn't pushed and tried to make Lana talk about leaving Smallville. Though it makes me wonder why she doesn't tell him with him knowing about Clark's secret and all. He's head of the I hate Luthor fan club haha or is that Jonathan Kent? haha. I really am interested in seeing more of Pete and hopes he gains a bigger part. I wonder how he gotten tied up with CGI since we last seen him he was roadie haha. So can't wait to see more of this.
I liked Quentin in this episode even though it was stupid of him to run off and try to get to Cynthia on his on. Yet it was good as well cause it showed that he doesn't always use that advanced brain of his and is a little impulsive? Waller made the episode for me again, she's learning about Lana pretty fast but it's Waller and she's well just incredible so you can't have it nay other way now can you?
Cynthia becoming an agent, I wonder what lies Waller to her. And Gold...I'm totally interested in seeing the next episode. I love your cliff hangers. I give this episode a 10/10. It had a good flow. It had no holes and I'm totally wanting to smash those purple crystals for hurting my Lana. Great god yet again, Chris.
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Post by Jack Malone on Jun 22, 2010 2:22:45 GMT -6
The third episode was great. It had a nice, action-packet plot, some great interactions among the characters, and other little twists and turns. I think the story that shone the best for me was Quentin's. This whole arc about his wife, and now it seems she could be alive, has really shifted everything on its head for me, and I'm really intrigued. I think its a great story I think you'll use well, so I'm looking forward to how it plays out.
Speaking of Quenting, there was more interaction between him and Cynthia -- which I'm still trying to warm up to. At times, Cynthia seems really young and not fully mature, but other times she seems really focussed and understanding of Quentin. Here it was a mixture of both. I like her more mature, and think she's more likeable that way.
Lana's story was pretty good this episode too. I like the call back to her dead parents (a huge story in smallville), and it was a nice touch. I did miss her a bit this episode. I don't know why, she still had a big part, but I'd like to see some more of her.
The best character you've got here is Amanda Waller. Hands down. You write her so well, and so evil. I'm actually scared for Lana and the others when it comes to her. Poor Pete. That ending was pretty jaw dropping -- scared for his life.
Overall, I think I enjoyed the other two episodes a touch better; but this still managed to hold some great twists, interactions, and action so I think I'll give it a 9/10. I'm in a pretty dodgy mood at the moment (tired), so I'll read it again when I'm more cheerful and it might come off differently the second time. But I rather enjoyed it!
Plus: THANK YOU for making the scripts longer. I think it really helped the pace of the episode, and I think now it reads better as well.
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Post by Keisha on Jun 22, 2010 19:30:49 GMT -6
Well, I must say that this episode is a lot stronger than the others. I'll give a more in depth review later but for now I'll say that I enjoyed it.
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Post by gamila on Jun 25, 2010 3:22:55 GMT -6
For Suicide i give 9 I really love Amanda she is so smart and evil, and you can never know her next move, i was scared she was going to kill Ross....then what made her change her mind?? guess we will know in the next episode  Now that Ross heard the phone conversation, i guess he'll be more involved in the story line.... And why Quentin should keep secrets from Lana?? i felt really sorry for him, but i'm pretty sure his fiancee still alive, and that maybe we will find her working for someone we know...  I really enjoyed the suicide squad, especially the first scene...while i was reading i really saw it all in my mind..."..as she cuts through the skin on Gun's neck with her fingernails"..you describe it so well... cannot wait for next episode... |
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Post by Jamison on Jun 28, 2010 15:06:40 GMT -6
For Suicide i give 9 I really love Amanda she is so smart and evil, and you can never know her next move, i was scared she was going to kill Ross....then what made her change her mind?? guess we will know in the next episode Now that Ross heard the phone conversation, i guess he'll be more involved in the story line.... Thanks for the view. Yes, Pete will have a much larger role around the mid season finale and definitely during the 2nd half of the season. He won't appear in episode 4, however he will have a key role in the 2 part mid season finale. Uh oh, you may be right...or are you? hmm... Thanks for that, I've was nervous because I keep telling myself I'm no good with action and scenes like that. So, thanks |
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Post by Jamison on Jun 28, 2010 15:12:58 GMT -6
It was the same way for me. I tried and tried to give Lana the central plot and make it seem like that, but Quentin's storyline just took over the whole episode. I think you'll enjoy what I've got planned for this plot.
I think the reason why she seems so unbalanced right now, is because she too is still trying to warm up to Lana and Quentin (mostly Lana) who doesn't actually trust her like Quentin does. She's a really playful character, but when she needs to be, she can turn it off in a second.
Don't worry, Pete will face his fear sooner or later.
Thanks Jack.
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Post by Jamison on Jun 28, 2010 15:13:52 GMT -6
Well, I must say that this episode is a lot stronger than the others. I'll give a more in depth review later but for now I'll say that I enjoyed it. Cool Keisha, looking forward to the in depth review. I'm glad you see improvements. |
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Post by gamila on Jun 30, 2010 16:13:15 GMT -6
I have just finish now to read Hacked..i give it 9  That was a cool episode....Let's start by saying that I'm really excited about the coming crossover with Watchtower...and correct me if I'm wrong, but in this last episode there was a sight of what is coming.... The Project Facultas has something to do with Emil's experiments back to Gotham?? they are very similar...kryptonic energy enable to turn every citizen into meta humans....and who is the Blondie beauty Campbell was talking about??? I may have some idea... ;D I still don't understand why Quentin was keeping secrets to Lana...he seems more close to Cynthia than to her... I really love Waller a little bit every episode...i enjoy her character, she is so evil...i guess Cynthia starts to lost faith in her...i think she is just close to discover the truth about checkmate!! very nice really...can't wait for the next episode |
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Post by Jack Malone on Jul 12, 2010 16:09:52 GMT -6
Finally finished "Hacked" and I'm glad I did. I think it was great to finally dig into some Quentin backstory, from his teaching days, and I think Stuart being apart of that life was a great tie in. I can't write a full review because I've read little snippets each day, and its hard to remember all of it as a whole - but I really liked this episode. I think its one of, if not my favourite episode of the season so far.
Can't wait for the next one!
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Post by Jason T. Davis on Jul 17, 2010 20:48:13 GMT -6
I'm gonna review the latest episode, "Diminish" which has got to be one of my favorite episode of the season so far.
Okay, so you started the episode off with Lana expressing to Cynthia that she's been having bad headaches, and you didn't make it seem like it was an important factor of the episode which I thought was great. The way you built up that storyline was perfect. Very well executed. AWESOME!
We finally get to see Valentina's face in some form. I love your casting of Ali Larter. She's looks perfect for the role. I can't wait to see how you work her storyline in the coming episodes/seasons. I'm sure it will be VERY pleasing in my eyes.
My favorite in this episode has got to be Jake. It's crazy because I remember thinking to myself..."Why the hell is he even there?" But you really expanded on his character in this one and I'm SOO glad for it because you got the chance to introduce Jade and the Green Lanterns earlier than you said you would! YAY! So, Jake is completely self aware but his mind has been fragmented. A superpowered confused man...never a good thing. It'll be interesting to see where you'll take his character in the coming episodes. Is he good? Will he fight with Lana? Or will he be set back into another one of Waller's traps? I can't wait! Jade was AMAZING in this episode. I can't wait to see her again because I can really imagine her working well with this story and AWWW! Her and Jake were so cute together. There's chemistry there, and I hope they get a chance to further their relationship somewhere down the line.
So, Quentin has finally discovered how much of a BITCH Cynthia really is. I'm sorry, you know how I feel about her. She's a immature, manipulative brat! Just for the people that don't know. I'm glad her secret is out. It seems like Trinity is finally starting to jump off into something big! Cynthia has to be my least favorite character. I won't say she isn't written well, because she is. But she's just the thorn in my backside, you know? There's always that one character that you would be able to do without seeing and, for me, it's her. Hopefully she'll redeem herself and finally get a boyfriend of her own and stop pushing up on Lana's man. Oh yeah, I went there. Okay...moving on from that.
Amanda was great. She's always great. You write her character so well. My favorite scene of the episode has to be the one between Waller and Cynthia when she yells at her for the first time. It was so funny, so intense. I loved it.
It was great to see that Pete is taking up a more active role in the show. We haven't really seen much of him so I'm glad he's finally becoming a bigger part of the show. Maybe he'll even have interactions with character besides Lana and Amanda in the coming episodes!
Cheshire is back?? What the hell? Can't wait to see how you explain that how she survived getting hit by a train. lmao
Well, I think this episode was GREAT. Your descriptiveness is always refreshing. Your dialogues are always great and the storyline for this episode was EPIC. I'm biting my nails off, waiting for part two! So, I'll give this episode a 10/10. It was perfect!
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Post by MJ on Jul 17, 2010 21:00:52 GMT -6
Just felt the need to point out that line literally made me laugh out loud when I read it. |
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Post by Jason T. Davis on Jul 17, 2010 21:12:24 GMT -6
LOL It's just so true! I can't stand her and her stupidity. |
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Post by MJ on Jul 18, 2010 0:43:39 GMT -6
Okay, so I finally got around to reading the first episode of Trinity. I must say, I was a little bit worried about what it would be like since I'm not a big Lana fan but I was pleasantly surprised. I actually like how you've portrayed Lana in Trinity, she comes across as very mature and determined which I quite like. The character I really liked in this first episode though was Quentin. His character just really stood out out to me and I can't wait to see more of him. Cynthia on the other hand, she just grates on my nerves for some reason. It's not that she's a badly portrayed character, it's just that I really don't like her XD. Maybe she changes in later episodes though and I might begin to like her character a little more (but judging from Jason's comment above I really doubt that ). I don't think I really have that much more to say on the episode. The script may have been a little on the short side but there were a lot of positives that made up for that. It had a good, strong storyline and characterisation, your script had very few errors from what I saw and overall it was a very enjoyable season opener. I'm going to rate it an 8/10. Although a very good episode it didn't quite have that 'wow' factor that would have pushed my rating up to a 9 or 10. Oh, and I plan on making my way through the rest of Trinity's episodes soon but with Uni starting up again this week I can't guarantee that I'll get though them very fast |
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Post by Jamison on Jul 18, 2010 1:24:21 GMT -6
Okay, so I finally got around to reading the first episode of Trinity. I must say, I was a little bit worried about what it would be like since I'm not a big Lana fan but I was pleasantly surprised. I actually like how you've portrayed Lana in Trinity, she comes across as very mature and determined which I quite like. The character I really liked in this first episode though was Quentin. His character just really stood out out to me and I can't wait to see more of him. Cynthia on the other hand, she just grates on my nerves for some reason. It's not that she's a badly portrayed character, it's just that I really don't like her XD. Maybe she changes in later episodes though and I might begin to like her character a little more (but judging from Jason's comment above I really doubt that ). I don't think I really have that much more to say on the episode. The script may have been a little on the short side but there were a lot of positives that made up for that. It had a good, strong storyline and characterisation, your script had very few errors from what I saw and overall it was a very enjoyable season opener. I'm going to rate it an 8/10. Although a very good episode it didn't quite have that 'wow' factor that would have pushed my rating up to a 9 or 10. Oh, and I plan on making my way through the rest of Trinity's episodes soon but with Uni starting up again this week I can't guarantee that I'll get though them very fast Thanks for the review MJ! I'm glad you gave it a chance Lana has changed quite a lot since we last saw her in Smallville. I think, for the better. Quentin has always been my favorite character as well. I think he's may be a little more easier to relate to. Wow...I never knew so many people disliked Cynthia's character! I promise, she'll get better after the mid season finale of season one. Thanks for the rating! I appreciate it! The script length has gotten better. I think episode 2 is even shorter but episode 3 is the start of 50+ page scripts. That's also when the episode improve in quality. Can't wait to hear what you think of those episodes and please...take your time. No rush, cause I know how school is. |
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Post by Keisha on Jul 19, 2010 19:17:22 GMT -6
Sorry this is so late. Overall, I've seen a great improvement in your script. The execution is a lot cleaner and your descriptions are more vivid. They bring me right into the story and make for a more enjoyable experience. I think the issue with the first review was that I was expecting something different. Heck, before the script I thought of her as a bad girl. Shows how much I know lol. It only took a little time to get into the story and really start to enjoy the show.
Diminish started out with something as simple as Lana taking two pills for her headaches. Who knew what that would lead to. I found this to be your strongest script written so far. I love the pacing of it. Everything just flowed really well. My favorite scene involves my favorite character Amanda Walker, when she kicks that little biotch Cynthia out of her office and puts her in her place. I just love how that scene played out and it felt like redemption because Cynthia's so irritating. Anyway, I thought you had such a strong story going into this episode. Lana's headache in the beginning that lead to her fainting was greatly executed. Also loved the Quentin/Cynthia situation. You handled all of these characters very well and gave them the right amount of attention. I found myself really getting into it and was glad to see the improvements made. You're getting better with each script. With that said, I give this episode a 9.5/10
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