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Post by MJ on Jun 1, 2010 8:15:01 GMT -6
Thanks for the feedback so far  I was originally going to wait until I had finished the pilot episode before posting the pitch but I had way too much fun writing it up and couldn't wait to share it with everyone. They way I'm going with the pilot so far should see it ready by tomorrow night or sometime on Thursday. |
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 23:26:23 GMT -6
 SynopsisEdge of Vision is a supernatural crime series set one hundred years in the future. Fifty-four years before the events in Edge of Vision the human race was suddenly introduced to an alternate plane of existence when The Fracture was formed. The Fracture was a break in the theoretical wall that separated the human world from its parallel plane of existence, which soon became known as Pandemonium. Pandemonium represented its namesake in almost every sense of the word. It was a place of chaos inhabited by human-like creatures, who became known as Demons, and they were more than happy to cross over to Earth when The Fracture appeared. These Demons were similar in nature to the world’s worst criminals and it wasn’t long before a new branch of the police force was set up to deal specifically with crimes that involved them.
Victoria “Tori” Lance (Zooey Deschanel) is one of the Demon Crime Investigative Unit’s (DCIU) detectives and a Sensitive with the ability to tap into and sense the energy from both Pandemonium and the Demons that cross over. Under the watchful eye of their boss, DCIU Special Agent Nora Fields (Paget Brewster), Tori and partner Detective Lloyd Harmon (Michael Chiklis) work to take down the Demons wreaking terror on their city, Barton. With the help and support of Dr. Cassie Brewer (Isla Fisher), DCIU’s coroner, and Technical Analyst Adam Parker (John Francis Daley), Tori’s life is just where she wants it to be. Of course, nothing’s ever perfect for long and Tori soon find herself the obsession of a Demonic serial killer (Callum Blue). Just when she thinks things couldn’t get any worse an unfortunate event leaves Harmon out of action and Tori is left to partner up with the new guy with an attitude problem, Detective Shayne Grey (Eric Szmanda). Even with her skills as a sensitive she never saw this coming…Main Cast
Zooey Deschanel
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Detective Victoria “Tori” Lance
Victoria, more commonly known as “Tori”, Lance is a Detective who’s been working with the DCIU for three years. With a strong sense of justice and determination coupled with her evolving abilities as a Sensitive she would be one of the best detectives of the unit, if she wasn’t constantly taking risks and mouthing off at her superiors. She’s been reprimanded a number of times but the fact that she’s family friends with the boss and been able to solve almost every case put in front of her as so far been enough to keep her job. She may be constantly crossing lines but the people around her can’t deny her simple desire to find justice in the world.
Eric Szmanda
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Detective Shayne Grey
The newest transfer into the Barton DCIU, Shayne Grey is a cocksure, brazen detective who is, surprisingly, very good at his job. Though his work ethic is topnotch his undesirable personality has seen him moved between DCIU departments every year since he joined the unit. He’s been told this time he has to make it work but will he be able to keep his personality in check when asked to partner with the snarky Detective Lance? Nora Fields has given him one last chance and if she requests his transfer out of her unit he can kiss is career in the DCIU goodbye.
Paget Brewster
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DCIU Special Agent Nora Fields
DCIU Special Agent Nora Fields is very good at her job. So good, in fact, that she’s been offered numerous promotions and transfers to better paying and higher ranking positions. She’s turned down every one. Nora is happy where she is, running the Barton division of the DCIU where she worked hard to earn the respect and admiration of those working under her. Being a friend of Tori’s father has given her a soft spot for the younger detective but she attempts to remain as professional as possible while they’re working together. Truth be told she’s probably looked the other way far too many times when it comes to Tori’s behavior but you’d be hard pressed to find anyone who would call her out on it.
Isla Fisher
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Dr. Cassie Brewer
Dr. Cassie Brewer is the rather eccentric coroner of the DCIU and Tori’s long time friend. Cassie is much loved by all those working with the DCIU thanks to her vibrant personality and sense of humor. It’s a pity she spends all day working with corpses. Even down in the morgue Cassie is able to light up your day with a smile or wry joke. Sure, she likes to wear rather bright clothes and has dubbed herself “Queen of the Dead” but she’s the best friend and voice of reason (usually) that Tori couldn’t live without.
John Francis Daley
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Technical Analyst Adam Parker
Though it was a little hard at first for the DCIU to take the young Adam Parker seriously he’s quickly proving his place amongst the hardened detectives and has earned the affectionate (and slightly condescending) nickname of “Kid”. A computer wiz at school, Adam was hired by the government as soon as he’d finished his education and moved between departments as needed until he was brought to the DCIU a year ago. He’s Tori’s go-to guy for information, partly because he’s good at his job, partly because he hasn’t turned her down yet. There are rumors floating around though that the reason he’s so willing to help is that he’s harboring a small crush on the detective.Supporting/Recurring Cast
Michael Chiklis
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Detective Lloyd Harmon
Lloyd Harmon has been working in the DCUI for decades and has been Tori’s mentor and partner since she joined. He may consider Tori a handful but in his opinion she’s also one of the best up and coming detectives he’s ever been partnered with. Lloyd may come across as a big, scary guy but on the inside he’s a real softy. He’s never found time for a family of his own but has often stated that the Barton DCIU is all the family he’ll ever need.
Callum Blue
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Vincent Reed
Once a human with a bright future, now Vincent Reed is now nothing but a monster created by demons that crossed The Fracture. Driven insane by the demon blood in his veins, Vincent kills without mercy in an attempt to get closer to Victoria Lance. Why he must find Tori is a mystery even to him. All he knows is that it’s the one clear thought in his mind as his sanity slowly decays.Episode Guide
Episode 1.01- Out of Sight Part 1
DETECTIVE VICTORIA “TORI” LANCE’S DAY JUST WENT TO HELL – After a bad morning Tori (Deschanel) and partner Detective Lloyd Harmon (Chiklis) find out the Demonic serial killer (Blue) they’d been hunting for the last couple of months has killed again and this time he’s getting personal. Distracted by a serial killers threat hanging over her head, Tori doesn’t realize the danger some of her closest friends are in until it’s too late. Also stars Brewster, Fisher and Daley.
Episode 1.02- Out of Sight Part 2
THERE’S A NEW FACE IN TOWN- With Lloyd (Chiklis) out of action, Special Agent Nora Fields (Brewster) partners Tori (Deschanel) up with the new transfer, Detective Shayne Grey (Szmanda). While still trying to identify their mystery serial killer (Blue), Tori’s going to find out that this game of cat and mouse they’re playing is only just beginning. Also stars Fisher and Daley.
Episode 1.03- Troubled Waters
TENSIONS ARE HIGH AS THE NEW PARTNERS STRUGGLE TO WORK TOGETHER- Tori (Deschanel) and Shayne (Szmanda) are close to breaking point as their personalities clash. After failing to succeed in what should have been a simple apprehension, Special Agent Field (Brewster) threatens the pair with a suspension if they can’t get their act together. But when it comes down to a life or death situation are the pair going to be able to put their differences aside or will their determination to hate each other be their downfall? Also stars Fisher, Daley and Chiklis.
Episode 1.04- Fun Fair
SOME OVERZEALOUS DECORATING OF THE LOCAL CARNIVAL’S GHOST TRAIN POINTS TO DEMON ACTIVITY- When the heads of several missing people show up in the ghost train ride of Barton’s bayside carnival Tori (Deschanel) and Shayne (Szmanda) are sent to investigate. This Demon is going to pull out all the stops to make sure this carnival trip is one the detectives won’t be forgetting any time soon. Also stars Brewster, Fisher and Daley.
Episode 1.05- In Too Deep
A CASE HITS A LITTLE TO CLOSE TO HOME FOR CASSIE- When Dr. Cassie Brewer (Fisher) is asked to conduct a research-based autopsy on the body of a Demon she’s more than happy to comply. That is, until she’s cornered by another Demon who wants something their dead Demon had. Can she get a message out to Tori (Deschanel) in time or will her life ironically end in her own morgue? Also stars Szmanda, Brewster and Daley.
Episode 1.06- Misguided Trust
THE DEMONS ARE LEARNING QUICKLY HOW TO BEST CREATE CHAOS- It has been common knowledge ever since The Fracture that Demons like nothing better than to cause chaos but no one ever expected them to get creative. Tori (Deschanel) and Shayne (Szmanda) have their work cut out for them when a Demon manages to infiltrate a local government office and create panic in the city and it looks like the DCIU is it’s next target. Also stars Brewster, Fisher, Daley and Chiklis.
Episode 1.07- Cat and Mouse
THE MYSTERIOUS DEMONIC SERIAL KILLER RESURFACES- When murder victims begin showing up with their mystery serial killers M.O, Tori (Deschanel) and Shayne (Szmanda) find their cold case isn’t so cold after all. As they race to stop the ever-increasing body count, will they see their killer’s (Blue) trap or run right into it? Also stars Brewster, Fisher and Daley.
Episode 1.08- Migraine
TORI’S SENSITIVE ABILITIES ARE ON THE FRITZ- After her latest encounter with Vincent Reed (Blue), Tori (Deschanel) finds her Sensitive abilities aren’t working quite like they normally should. When Special Agent Field (Brewster) forces her to take time off until she’s feeling better, Tori takes matters into her own hands. Enlisting the help of Adam (Daley) she attempts to find out what exactly is going on in her head and if it has anything to do with the mysterious Vincent Reed. Also stars Szmanda and Fisher.
Episode 1.9- Corrupted
THEY’VE SEEN REGULAR PEOPLE TURNED INTO DEMONIC KILLERS AND NOW THEY’RE GOING TO FIND OUT WHY- Adam (Daley) is shocked to find out his brother is using and dealing drugs but things take a turn for the worse when he finds out this new drug is Demonic in origin. Tori (Deschanel) and Shayne (Szmanda) are quick to jump on the case while Lloyd (Chiklis) brings to light some new information that will change how they fight against the Demons forever. Also stars Brewster and Fisher.
Episode 1.10- Renovators Nightmare
NOT EVERYONE SEEMS TO BE AS OPPOSED TO THE DEMONS AS FIRST THOUGHT- Tori (Deschanel) and Shayne (Szmanda) are surprised when they come across a small group of people petitioning for the rights of Demons. What appears to be a harmless cause quickly becomes a big problem when it’s discovered that they’re buying houses along The Fracture to use as Demon hotels. Will the DCIU detectives be able to convince them to drop their ‘righteous cause’ before the Demons they’ve helped decide to turn the tables?
Episode 1.11- Calm Before the Storm
TORI’S PEACFUL WEEK IS DISRUPTED BY CONSTANT NIGHTMARES- What should have been an easy week catching up on paper work is tuned into an emotional rollercoaster for Tori (Deschanel) when her sensitive abilities decide to take over her dreams. Sleep deprived and stressed, she once again seeks out self-proclaimed Psychic and Sensitive Elise whose revelation is the last thing Tori wants to hear.
Also stars Szmanda, Brewster, Fisher, Daley and Chiklis.
Episode 1.12- Pandemonium
WELCOME TO HELL- Tori (Deschanel) has been trying to track down Demonic serial killer Vincent Reed (Blue) for almost a year and when she comes face to face with him this time she’s not going to let him slip away. Despite warnings from her friends Cassie (Fisher), Adam (Daley) and even her irritating partner Shayne (Szmanda) that she’s getting too involved Tori digs deeper, but this time she’ll find she’s too deep to get out. Also stars Brewster and Chiklis.DefinitionsBarton:
A large harbor city where Edge of Vision is set.
Demon Crime Investigative Unit (DCIU):
A branch of the police force that was formed to deal specifically with crimes involving Demons and The Fracture. There are DCIU’s in every major city.
Sensitives:
People who have a heightened connection to the natural energies that seep into our world through The Fracture. Sensitives vary in the abilities they possess and how well they can tap into the energies from Pandemonium appears to be different in every person.
The Fracture:
The Fracture is the name given to the breaks in the theoretical wall that separates the planes of existence. The Fracture lines act as a crossing point between Earth and Pandemonium. At the current time it is believed only Demons have the ability to cross between the planes.
Pandemonium:
The parallel plane of existence to the earth that we know. It is a place of destruction and its inhabitants seem to show no morals.
Demons:
The name given to the human like creatures that inhabit Pandemonium.Production Notes-I am aware that Zooey Deschanel is currently also cast in another show on the VPN but I have discussed it with Jake Malone who has told me that it should be alright for her to star in Edge of Vision as her role on her other show isn’t major.
-Edge of Vision will have a first season consisting of the 12 episodes detailed above in the episode guide with a two episode opening (Out of Sight Part 1 and 2), nine mid season episodes and a one episode season finale (Pandemonium).
-A small bit of trivia: Edge of Vision came into creation last year as an attempt for Script Frenzy 09. It was inspired by the following prompt.
"This is a horror/drama. The story is about a psychic who is constantly opposing a murderer with demonic blood. It starts in a ghost town. The story begins with someone getting lost and ends with a funeral. It takes place in a large city in the future." |
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 21:19:17 GMT -6
Oh, wow. Your work is amazing! Everything's really eye-catching too. You've done a great job with these (:
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 21:15:11 GMT -6
Yeah, spoilers will probably keep us happy during the break. We're easily pleased like that XD
I'm pretty sure you enjoy dropping hints and spoilers about upcoming episodes though, just for the hype it creates :P
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 16:20:02 GMT -6
Same as maria26. Another great episode but not quite as good as the premiere.
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 16:16:44 GMT -6
I read 'Prototype' last night but couldn't review it then because I really needed to sleep if I was going to be able to get up on time for my 8am Uni class XD Anyway, since I'm waiting for my class to get started I figured I could review now. Firstly, I think I'm going to give the episode a 7 also. Realistically I think it's more of a 7.5 but you don't have a voting option for that so I'll just go with 7  I did like all the action in this episode, it made it very exciting. We were getting all these plot elements thrown at us that made it a very fun and fast-paced episode. Maybe a little to fast in some places (a couple of times I felt I wasn't quite keeping up with the story) but overall really good. The whole Bruce working for Checkmate? Did not see that coming at all. I think I may have literally gaped at my laptop screen when I read that. His storyline was good though and the interaction with Oliver really helped to open up his character a little. As you predicted I did like Helena a lot more in this episode. I love how she works with Chloe as they do their whole job as Huntress and Watchtower and her and Mia were also quite good together also. I have to agree with loving Chloe and Perry together. You can tell he really cares for her, especially since he defies Amanda to try and keep Chloe safe. He'll (hopefully) be a very good friend to her for a long time to come. The Chloe/Oliver interaction was spot on as usual. I love how you portray them together And Chloe herself was fantastic in this episode. I like it when she gets out in the field, even if I does end up badly for her, like it did this time XD Overall another fantastic episode and I look forward to reading episode 3 when it comes out next week  |
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 6:00:30 GMT -6
Noooo! I have a love-hate relationship with cliff-hangers. Love using them myself, hate when I'm on the receiving end. You're going to drive me insane during that break |
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 5:32:37 GMT -6
Love the spoilers. I'd say they made me excited to see the episode but I'm already excited about every episode of Watchtower XD
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Post by MJ on May 31, 2010 1:12:25 GMT -6
Haha, I'm really excited too. I remember thinking the other day that a week is such a long time to wait when you're looking forward to something |
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Post by MJ on May 30, 2010 9:05:32 GMT -6
I noticed you quoted me in your latest VPN video Jack. I almost didn't notice it at first but when I did it made me laugh Good job on the video by the way, it was great! |
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Post by MJ on May 30, 2010 1:23:54 GMT -6
I totally agree. Gives me something to look forward every week |
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Post by MJ on May 29, 2010 18:04:26 GMT -6
I always felt Kate's death on NCIS was really hard-hitting and emotional. I knew before I watched the episode that she was going to die but it still shocked me when it happened in literally the last few seconds.
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Post by MJ on May 27, 2010 7:58:48 GMT -6
Just a random little tidbit but I thought I'd share:
Perry totally reminds me of my old art teacher. I was thinking about it just before when I was telling my sister about Watchtower and trying to describe Perry to her. The resemblance is kinda creepy actually... XD
I also want to comment on what you just posted about Helena not having any romantic connections with any of the main cast. I was wondering about that myself for a while but I think you're right about her not being in the right place for a relationship. I kinda got that feeling during the first episode that she's a bit emotionally troubled, especially at the moment, and any attempt to try and pair her off with someone would have felt a little weird. So I think you made the right decision there. Oh, and the more you reveal about Helena's character the more I'm beginning to like her :)
And a quick question before I'm done: Are the episodes pre-written for the first half of the season or do you write them as you go along?
I don't know why that question popped into my head but now I really want to know the answer :D
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Post by MJ on May 27, 2010 6:06:00 GMT -6
OMG. Deadshot is sounding like it's going to be an awesome episode I'm so excited! The art work for it is absolutely stunning too. Krystal has done a great job. |
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Post by MJ on May 25, 2010 6:31:13 GMT -6
Hi :) This is my first time posting but I've been lurking around for quite a while waiting for the first episode of 'Watchtower' to come out. Now that it has all I can say is: Amazing!
Actually, that's a lie. I have lots to say XD
Firstly, I'm happy to say that overall the episode was fantastic. I was reading it on the bus back from Uni and was hooked from start to finish. I like that we were thrown right into the middle of things and fed bits and pieces of the characters backstories as the episode went along. It's a technique I really like (and often use in my own writing) and though it was used very well in the episode.
The relationships between each of the characters were portrayed very well. I particularly enjoyed the scene between Huntress and Chloe at the Gotham Daily, I think it was one of the best parts of the episode. I really got a feel for where both Chloe and Helena are coming from and the kind of people they are in that particular scene, the action was an added bonus.
A lot of people seem to be a bit iffy on the character Huntress so far and I think I'm going to have to hold out on my opinion of her also. There were some parts where I really enjoyed the character (mentioned above) but other times where I just didn't like her at all. I don't know, maybe I'll warm up to her as we see more of Huntress/Helena. She has the potential to be a great character and I'm sure that comes through a bit more in the upcoming episodes.
There were only a couple of things that bothered me a little. One was that the story seemed to move a little too fast. I know it was the premier episode and there is a lot to be explained in it but I think a little more fleshing out of some scenes would have been great. I felt like the episode was skipping around a lot, trying to fit a lot of info in to just one episode.
Also (not that this has anything to do with actual story) there were a couple of typos and other miscellaneous errors that were a little distracting and took away from the overall aesthetics of the script. Maybe a proofreader to help pick out those little things before the episode is released? (I'm happy to volunteer, I rather enjoy proofreading work that isn't my own :D)
Those few things were easy to overlook though, thanks to the total awesomeness of 'Watchtower's' first episode. I loved it and can't wait for episode two. Keep up the fantastic work :)
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