Hahaha, it was the first thing I thought when I saw "Witches/Warlocks". I remember it being the prominent story of True Blood in series 4, I think? But yeah, I really enjoyed that series. And I liked the idea of "pagan" witches, rather than the Charmed Ones -- who obviously have inherited powers.
But the whole "Hellbound" series sounds fantastic Chris, I do hope it goes on for a while! Plus, Sam Witwer is such a fantastic actor in the U.S. version of "Being Human", he could definitely pull off another vampire!
I'd probably chose the witches/warlocks - but have your own twist on them, pagan witches maybe? Only because the idea of "necromancy" around vampires just screams at me. That could cause a bit of a stir, maybe? Just me? :-P
Whoa. I must say, when I was reading this, the introduction from Brent, I was thinking this was a masterpiece, but to be quite honest, I felt a little let down when I read through the rest, because with the quality of your description, I was expecting a full-blown out plan. However, having said that, I agree mostly with what Brady has said above, you have left a lot of questions – which in some cases, could be good, but sometimes, the reader/watcher is just begging for more answers, and that is the position I found myself in.
As far as the title and the characters are concerned, they're all great! They really do have potential, and with the certain gifts they possess, it seems like there could be a lot of development here. For example, Zoey could maybe struggle immensely to control the fire power? – And since it only states she can "manipulate" fire, she could have doubts about herself in the group, because she cannot actually conjure fire, she has to carry a lighter around with her? I do have to say, though, I was hoping Frankie's power of "freezing time temporarily" would develop into turning objects into solid ice? With that, there could be the classic "comic-relief" factor in between the serious scenes, involving Zoey and Frankie always arguing over their powers, since they both contradict one another.
But for me to give a proper review, I would like to see more – and also, I think you should definitely take it away, produce a plan of the whole series, and make quite a few changes, not drastic ones, we don't want the whole show changed completely! For me, one of the gaps you've left, what is the Higher Power? Why is Brent working for them? Is he the "chosen one"? Are they using him for evil? These plots and twists would spice the "supernatural" factor of the series. Also, because the actress to play "The Messenger" is extremely beautiful, do we see a Brent/Messenger "forbidden" love going on?
But overall, I love the concept, and the idea is very well planned, just not detailed yet for a proper review to be posted. However, you've done a good job. Well done, David. I agree with Jay too, this is one of your best ideas yet!
To add to my previous post, I would probably change Neil McDermott, only because he played a lover of Lacey on EastEnders, and because they look fairly the same age – I know vampires are immortal and don't age, I would just refer him as her sibling or friend – just a bit of plain advice, but seriously. Good luck!
Hayden, with little respect – who are you to judge? We've all been there, we've all thought of a good idea and just haven't figured out how to make it completely original or develop it into something we can call our own. I do have to agree with Aimee, the pitch is undeveloped, and could be a little "samey", but improvement is what your ideas and our ideas are for.
I personally like the fact that more and more British actor/tresses are being introduced on this website, most frequent the EastEnders cast members, ie. Lacey, Charlie and Scott – however, this pitch could have promise. But the first thing I would work on, is to develop this into your own pitch, because we've all seen the "vampire and hunter falls in love" before – but I definitely feel this has a good potential.
Good luck with it – and just ignore Hayden, that was immature and rude.
This idea is probably one of the most creative I've seen on the VPN. I like the characters, they're well mapped out, and I think Violet will be somebody I would like to read the most of! The pitch itself caught my attention, as did the title, "the Wolfpack", it's bold, loud and definitely straight to the point. The characters really scream at me, which is always a good thing! I can clearly see this becoming its own universe, similar to Buffy or Charmed, and I like the idea of separate lives, however I'd have them come together at one point!
I'd also like to see some conflict with vampires, witches etc. I think that would be really good, and it would also give us an idea on how you can imagine these creature. Very well done, and the best of luck coming your way, I hope!
As I've said in previous feeds that you have posted, I do like this idea, but I just think it lacks in something. I just feel like there is something missing. I understand it's your own piece and seems to be original to me, and obviously something you're passionate about, I just cannot help looking at it and feeling something is missing.
For starters, I would probably run this through a quick Microsoft Word to sort out a few spelling mistakes, like "telekinesis", and as Brady pointed out, "Molecular Combustion" would sound far more professional, rather than "blows things up". Secondly, I would derive my full attention to the basis of your descriptions and your characters -- they seem to be well thought out, though they do lack in solidness. They don't seem to do anything, and if they were in the series on television, it would seem as if they would just be standing there, rather than interacting or doing much really.
Thirdly, I feel you have generated your idea from "Charmed", definitely, and that is an all-time favourite show of mine, so congratulations to you for coming up with this idea, however what I don't quite understand is, how are the three sister witches actually witches? What is their origin, and if they are on Earth, and not from where Mali is, then what makes Mali so special? -- I would also consider changing Sophie Summers from being a care-free mother, to an a believable mother with a solid structure, because at the moment, it seems like she's just allowing a young, unknown girl stay with her and her SON (where anything could happen -- if you know what I mean) which probably wouldn't be allowed now a-days.
And finally, I would definitely go away and review what you've posted, and tweek some things, and PLEASE, PLEASE focus your attention on this, because it does sound like a very good supernatural teen-drama show, and sounds like something we would see on Disney or Nickelodeon.
Overall, I think you have a good idea, however there are specific things that would be better changed -- and with all due respect, I completely agree with what Brady has said, make sure you wait patiently after you've posted on the VPN because everybody here are really busy, patience is a virtue!
But I send the very best of luck to you, and I do hope you write this and it gets pitched, because it's a very tight and good idea you have here!
Well done, mstwprod!
P.S. -- I would probably change a few episode names:
Episode 9 - No-One Mourns The Wicca
Episode 10 - Once a Witch, Always A Witch.
Because they're real episode names of a fanfiction series by ShiningAllure on YouTube, and may be copyrighted, just a friendly warning! And again, very best of luck!!
Everybody, I am sorry to say that I will not be continuing with this webisode pitch, for reasons of my own terms -- I want to apologise for those who have been awaiting the pilot, though if you are desperate to read it, I can always send you what I have.
Thank you for your convenience, sorry for doing this - believe me, I feel awful.
Thank you so much Aimee xD. What I wanted was a character-driven series that focused more on them, rather than the actual genre of the show -- similar to BTVS and Angel -- but I wanted real elements to be placed within it too, but not like a soap opera. So the "cousin" thing was just the first step , get ready for some more darker tales similar xD.
I'm so wicked -evil cackle. Thanks again Aimee, it means a lot for the kind words. I'm still writing the first episode now, but I do hope you enjoy it -- actually, I might put together a teaser for you all first -- see what happens, thanks!
Brady, that is so lovely - thank you very much! In regards to Harry, (I obviously didn't explain it very well, I'm at fault), he is her cousin, and has a major crush on her - but then his feelings become slightly awry and he begins to have feelings for boys xDD.
As for the episodes, I'm writing them right now, so they will be up soon - but not just yet.
And again, thank you for your comments, they really mean a lot, and I appreciate it too. As for the pilot, I'm working on it - very much so. And yes, I do hope I stick with it too, but we'll just see how things pan out! Thanks again
Have you ever snapped? Have you ever broken a glass when you were angry. Have you ever hit somebody when you were angry? There is a darkened soul deep inside of everyone, it just takes the right thing to pull it out…
SEQUENCE ONE PREMISE: Four friends. Four mistakes. Four reunite. Jeremy Baldwin, Stacey Holmes and Didi Andrews went to college and university together – but after that, nothing. No contact, nothing. After a quick little browse on the internet, anything can be found, and that thing for Didi was her old friends – Match.com.
After contacting them, it was time to meet – but just when things were going well, something will happen, something big – something illegal. And this something will bring the group closer than ever before, so they truly are… In this together.
JASON HUGHES as: Jeremy Baldwin Jeremy is a ruthless business man who routinely manipulates his customers into his own perverse plans for their business. Little is known about his past; however it is obvious he tries to cover it up all of the time. He is married, with children, and comes across as a "family man", with a warm personality, though he has tendencies to turn cold – fiery at times. He has a doting crush on Didi and admits he always has done since their time together in college.
CHRISTINA HENDRICKS as: Stacey Holmes Stacey is a supermodel and a former journalist – after leaving college and her friends, she trained as an actress, but when that didn't go to plan, she decided to use her looks for what she wanted. She is an uptight work-aholic and likes nothing more than settling down after a long hard day of work with a glass of wine and some chocolates. She has a warm demeanour, but can spark off at any moment, and since she's three months pregnant, unbeknownst to her, she must be careful of what she drinks…
STERLING BEAUMON as: Harry Holmes Harry is the younger cousin of actress/journalist/supermodel Stacey Holmes – his parents died in a car crash, and he does nothing but follow Stacey around like a lost puppy. He has a terrible crush on her, but won't ever admit it. His feelings toward boys are starting to grow and he doesn't know what's quite happening. Harry is a caring boy, but like the others, his anger sometimes gets the better of him, though he doesn't like to use it, and there is a sense of guilt around him, his shyness is his fallback.
AUTUMN REESER as: Didi Andrews Didi is an eccentric and vibrant young lesbian. She knows her own taste and her own style and doesn't care what anybody else thinks. She tried very hard to conceal her past as a thief when she was younger, but it's always good to talk about things. Didi is a computer hacker, and has been for some time, which makes it easy for her when she is in a pickle online. She is very cool and chilled out, likes a good party, and normally questions her beauty. She is quirky, fun-loving and pretty.
MORE CHARACTERS WILL BE ADDED SOON! – DON'T WORRY.
1.01 | To Our Graves - Part 1/2 Old college and university friends, Didi Anderson, Jeremy Baldwin, Stacey Holmes and her younger cousin, Harry all decide it's time to meet up, and where better to go than splash the cash and book yourselves the whole "Ritz" hotel? Sounds like a good plan! Their reunion is going fine, until an old classmate, who vowed to seek Didi out and socially destroy her is there -- things soon turn sour – in more ways than one and the gang are forced to limit their contacts and combine together to form something of a criminal gang…
1.02 | The Aftermath Waking up to a horrific crime is one thing, but waking up and not remembering anything about the night before is another -- it's the Hangover all over again -- but at least for the gang of four, they haven't got to find their missing friend, they have to conceal a dirty crime committed by their drunken selves. Meanwhile, its make or break for Jeremy and his business – he's on the end of his tether and he can only just imagine what life would be like with Didi – but are things turning more sexual than romantic for him?
1.03 | Didi An episode purely based on Didi Andrews and her fractured past. Working as a boring shop assistant from London, she is noticed by a very rich and handsome male -- who swears to keep her safe, treat her like a princess, and give her everything she's ever wanted -- but unbeknownst to her, the real world she is about to enter, is a lot more splintered than she once anticipated.
1.04 – Jeremy 1.05 – Unlocked 1.06 – Harry 1.07 – Stacey 1.08 – Family
The next sequence should premier more episodes – but I'm unsure on how many at the moment.
I'm from the UK, so Doctor Who is the norm for me to watch, because I watched it religiously, and ^^ Donna Noble was my favourite - but I thought what happened to her was a little cruel. How she just forgot everything, it was almost pointless having her as a companion. Rose too, she was like the original, and the best - then just got snatched from the Doctor.
Martha was awful, and just needed to leave, so I'm glad she left to be "with her family". I really think Amy is good, however her accent just got on my nerves, and Rory was annoying too. I only liked Doctor Who when it was the Doctor and a companion.
It's really nice to see the American population liking shows from England, because I love most of your shows -- they're so fresh and new. Doctor Who by far is one of the best sci-fi shows out there, and the original series just shows what England is capable of making.
I thought it was a good film, but really annoying :/, like Amin said -- I thought it dragged on too, and pointlessly went on about the daughter, and then finds her unconscious. Fun! Good film, but a little draggy/annoying xD.