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Whoooooops I guess I got so caught up in my excitement, I missed that part. Expect a review of the pilot from me soon!

This is already one of my favourite shows of all time, and Tatiana Maslany has to be one of the best actresses ever, for her portrayal of all the clones as individual people. A lot of the time, I have to remind myself it's all one person in real life.

I've not really had chance to say anything about M:SCU, but even though I'm not really a fan of the DC Universe, I'm really looking forward to when this premieres! You have a really original concept and characters, and your episode plots all fit together really smoothly, and with really interesting and exciting plots. Can't wait for when this starts!

After a few month long (unintentional)break from script-writing, I am still working on this but I lost the original script file I had, which sucks, so I'm starting again It should take less time than it previously did

The Super Teens - Super Start Part One REVIEW

Hi Brady, I've gotten around to reading this finally so sorry for being late with a review (which reminds me I REALLY need to review the second episode of Audition ). I'm reviewing this as I read it so sorry if it some things I point out might later be addressed.

Teaser

Ooh I really like the introduction of scenery before the out-of-the-blue chase. It really hooks you in.
The shadowed figured seems really interesting and mysterious already so kudos for that, you do a really good job at keeping her identity hidden as I see the certain shots in my mind. Your writing is descriptive but without too much that it seems like a novel.

In the Investigation, despite it being so short, I really like the character of Detective Ashlock and I could really see Cassidy Freeman as her, so excellent choice and portrayal there.

Excellent descriptions of the triplets here in the next scene, and oh man is Janice a bitch. I don't know if that was intended, but it doesn't necessarily mean that it's a bad thing, as it's always good to have characters that aren't 100% nice and good, and have their flaws.

Right, this might just be me missing something, but I think you said earlier that they were walking but here the script says that Sara picks up her bag. Sorry if I missed something.

Woah, the earthquake part here is just amazing I can't fault it. It's very exciting and through minor actions you show more of the personalities of the characters. I need to carry on to Act One!

Act One

Although the death of Frank doesn't fully hit home, because we haven't got to know him. However, the fact you included the flashbacks does help to understand the loss to Janice and I found myself smiling at both of them.

Great job at the showing the relationship of the Knox family as Janice arrives home.



Whilst I understand this quote, it's just a little hard to wrap my head around and a tiny bit clunky. I think its just the double use of just so quickly. Sorry for being picky here But on the whole so far, I love your speech, it seems really natural and flows really well .

Okay so in the scene where Sara and Janice talk, I see a little bit more of Janice as she 'melts' and that she isn't just a bitch and a one-dimensional character, which is ALWAYS GOOD. The relationship between the two here is also shown to be caring, despite their fighting which is really sweet.

Now the power scene here now is interesting, as it is descriptive enough and doesn't feel out of the blue. Debbie's reaction is hilarious.



Now this line in the midst of the confusion between Clark and Sara made me crack up ;D Great execution too and it didn't feel like it was just chucked in there. Some of Janice's one-liners are amazing and I hope she has plenty more.

Now the end of this act here though, does seem a little rushed to get all of the powers introduced before the action starts. However, I do admit Clark's power introduction was the best and I really liked Debbie's reaction to it.

Act Two

The News scene is really exciting and I understand Jonathan's motive clearly. What I'm assuming is Audrey's death, also highlights the seriousness of the episode and show.

The Dream scene is both unnerving and exciting, I can't decide weather or not I hope its a premonition of what's to come.

I like the urgency next with the scene of Janice running away, showing the true bond between them all, and how the plot flows clearly.


Act Three

Another nice flashback here, and its making me sympathise with Janice more each time.

The fight scene about to begin here seems exciting but I just can't help but feel its a little out of the blue. However, as is to be expected with a series like this, I assume there will be many fight scenes and this one shows how well you can write them.

Also I like the point demonstrated by Clark about controlling their powers, and it was really thought provoking, proving that having the powers isn't so straightforward.

I Like the Old Woman in the park. She seems really nice and interesting, and though maybe it's a longshot, it would be really nice if she cropped up again in some form or another.

The scene with Sara and Clark practicing their powers was also really well written and interesting, especially the part about the triggers.


Act Four

The thug scene here is really exciting and a change of pace, again it also highlights the seriousness of the show. Again, I like the use of the triggers to control the powers, it reminds me slightly of Charmed.

I like the reaction to the attack afterwards because its really natural and human, reminding the reader that just because they have superpowers doesn't make the triplets courageous superheroes already.

And the triplets are reunited! Although Sara's reaction to Janice calling Clark was interesting highlighting how much she wants to get along with her sister.


Act Five

An interesting conclusion here, and the end really makes me want to the read the next part as soon as possible!

Overall I really enjoyed the episode, which suprised me since originally, I have to admit, the slightly cheesy name of the show and the name Upsville put me off a bit. But all my worries have been disproved and I really enjoyed reading this episode!

Minus the things I pointed out and a few SPAG issues, I couldn't fault anything with the episode and hope the rest can live up to it! ;D

Rating: 8/10

Just a quick notice to say that the pilot for this (as well as Fragment), is still being written, it's just that I got stuck writing it and it was scrapped. The plot summary is still the same but some other details have been modified. I've currently finished Act One

I didn't see many films this year so I only have a few and they're not in any order. I only saw films that LOOKED good and my local cinema has a VERY small range of films being shown at any time.

BEST

- Chronicle
- Pitch Perfect
- The Hunger Games
- Fun Size (Surprisingly)

but the very best in my opinion...

1. The Perks of Being a Wallflower

One more episode description added, Season One episode count is confirmed as ten. (This makes it one episode longer than Abnormals, my main series, but this season's story takes longer to tell in addition to Monster-of-the-Week episodes, setting up the overall series)